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POET’S DOZEN - OUTCAST FATE

Beautiful flowers,
jacaranda trees in bloom,
you and I, in spring.

With spring my ecstacy blossomed into a sense of pride,
as together in formal elegance, side by side we stride.

In fulfillment of the far-off depths of my lifelong dream,
hidden are the endless days of longing, years of yearning.

Love lost in time for promise of desire
with emptiness to shadow my first date,
as your heart did not feel my sacred fire.
Abashed in silence I curse my fate,
as I cry alone in my outcast state.


29th December, 2015

For contest: Poet’s dozen 2: First date
Sponsored by: Silent One
Haiku, couplet, free verse, English quintain

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/17/2016 8:17:00 PM
took me a little bit of time to get the form. When I did I got the poem. Nice work.
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Date: 8/17/2016 11:13:00 PM
Thank you very much, Beverly. Yes, the form can be tricky - this was for a contest which required the use of the four different forms. T.J
Date: 6/20/2016 2:02:00 PM
Hi T.J. you have pulled off this poets dozen brilliantly. You always put such thought into your words T.J. In your joy and sadness there is always a beauty to be found. I look not on this write as four different forms but i read this as a complete write and i think it is excellent T.J. Another winner. This is definitely a seven.
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Date: 6/21/2016 7:55:00 AM
Thank you very much, Mike, for your wonderful comment. What I love about poetry is having beauty in both joy and sadness. If I'm able to convey this across, I'm very pleased. I value your continued support. T.J
Date: 3/30/2016 12:10:00 PM
Beautiful haiku to start this wonderful poem TJ...A7
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Date: 3/30/2016 12:16:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Joseph. T.J
Date: 1/19/2016 1:08:00 PM
Great write Teppo..I loved the way it read....Seren
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM
Thank you very much, Seren. T.J
Date: 1/17/2016 1:03:00 AM
Great write Teppo..congrats... Seren
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Date: 1/17/2016 1:23:00 PM
Thank you very much, Seren. I value your visit and comment. T.J
Date: 1/16/2016 7:19:00 PM
Teppo, Congratulations on your "Poet's Dozen 2: First date" WIN!!! Love ~ LINDA ~
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Date: 1/17/2016 1:23:00 PM
Thank you very much, Linda. Your visit is very much appreciated. T.J
Date: 1/12/2016 1:47:00 PM
Nice write, Teppo. I am relieved to find out that mine was not the only first date that did not work out, but you expressed yours so much better.
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Date: 1/13/2016 5:00:00 AM
Thank you very much, Dan. Yes, it was a relief to read that a few others shared the same fate - but it seems for most, their first date was went very well. T.J
Date: 1/10/2016 8:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! Wow! Magnificent poem! Beautiful imagery and words! Great job! :)
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:56:00 AM
Thank you very much, Chantelle. T.J
Date: 1/10/2016 12:22:00 PM
This winning poem captures the pain of unrequited love. Congratulations! Janice
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:55:00 AM
Thank you very much, Janice. T.J
Date: 1/10/2016 3:18:00 AM
This is so sad. Heartbreak is never easy. I love the image of a blooming jacaranda tree. We have them here in Hawaii. I have always loved their lovely color. Congratulations on your wonderful win!
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:55:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Connie. This first date took place in Sydney, Australia back in 1974, hence the jacaranda trees which we in bloom at the time - we don't have them here in Finland. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 6:26:00 PM
Even bad experiences can turn out to be a winner...Nice one, T.J ~ Congratulations.
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:51:00 AM
Yes, that is so, Lin. Things have turned out well in the end. Thank you for your comments and encouragement. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 5:50:00 PM
While unfortunately this was a sad first date, you transformed the experience into and an excellent heartfelt piece, TJ! I thoroughly enjoyed the read and congratulations on a wonderful win, my friend! Pandita
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:50:00 AM
Thank you very much, Pandita, for your kind and valued comments. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 4:20:00 PM
What a great write - I can relate - congrats on your podium win in the contest - Ron
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:49:00 AM
Thank you very much, Ron. First dates don't always work out. This is my actual first date (ever) when I was 18. The venue was our school formal in Carlingford, Sydney, Australia in 1974. I lived in the lucky country for 20 years. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 4:03:00 PM
Congrats on your win Teppo :) *Smiles*
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:46:00 AM
Thank you kindly, Laura. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 3:38:00 PM
Teppo, Congrats on your win. SKAT
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:46:00 AM
Thank you very much, SKAT. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 3:13:00 PM
Very nicely written, congrats on your win!
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:45:00 AM
Thank you very much, John. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 3:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, T.J., love your first date imagery.
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:45:00 AM
Thank you very much, Eve. T.J
Date: 1/9/2016 3:05:00 PM
So beautifully written, Teppo, and so sad too. But you have the nice honor of your wonderful placement! Congratulations. Sandra
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Date: 1/13/2016 1:41:00 AM
Thank you, Sandra. It was a long time ago and wasn't meant to be. I am indeed honored by the wonderful placement. T.J
Date: 1/8/2016 3:11:00 AM
TJ, not all first dates has a happy beginning isn't it? The haiku is as easy as one two three but its a great catchy start for the sad ending..! I enjoyed@~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 1/8/2016 3:31:00 AM
Thank you very much for your visit and your comments, Olive Eloisa. T.J
Date: 1/5/2016 8:59:00 PM
Amazing write. I love it. You are an amazing poet. Terrific imagery and the photo was a nice touch. ~Katie
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Date: 1/6/2016 12:45:00 AM
Thank you very much for liking my poem and your kind words, Katie. T.J
Date: 1/5/2016 7:25:00 AM
A good, emotional write for the contest that I very much enjoyed (I don't know that we've crossed paths - so, hi). Your poem should fair well ... CayCay
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Date: 1/5/2016 7:28:00 AM
Thank you very much CayCay, for your kind words and for your visit. Much appreciated. T.J
Date: 1/3/2016 7:46:00 PM
What a great poem and I like the accompanying photo.
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Date: 1/3/2016 11:02:00 PM
Thank you very much, Richard. I appreciate your visit and your comments. T.J
Date: 1/2/2016 8:41:00 AM
Bittersweet... perhaps more bitter than sweet, however. Wonderful phrasing and imagery. '...together in formal elegance,' '...as I cry alone in my outcast state.' Well done T.J. Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 1/2/2016 2:09:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Keith. I am thoroughly pleased to receive your words of encouragement. T.J
Date: 12/31/2015 6:37:00 PM
good luck Teppo
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Date: 1/1/2016 3:46:00 AM
Thank you very much. T.J
Date: 12/31/2015 1:39:00 PM
Forms written oh so well, nice one Teppo ~~ wishing you and yours a Happy Healthy 2016 ~~ James :)
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Date: 12/31/2015 5:00:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, James. Happy New Year to you and your loved ones. T.J
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