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Perceiving Colors (Part Two, Brian's Contest)

All the colors that my eyes see Seem to become a part of me The red that bleeds my angry days The gray that shades my darkest ways The forest green that brings me ease The purple tracks from my disease Toni’s black dress that blesses my nights Faith is now my pillow of white Colors lead to one conclusion The rainbow is God’s illusion Through the rainbow what my eyes see I perceive immorality For within the words that I write The will in man to face the fight To change his life and learn to be A child of God proud and free Everyone perceives, as they will I can only write what I feel I feel these colors in my soul God’s rainbow leads to streets of gold I made a couple of minor changes to part one because it was brought to my attention that couplets should stay on syllable count throughout, I never knew that. I hope that's ok. If not I will use the original part one for they're very similar Part one & two for Sir. Brian's contest.

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Date: 9/24/2009 1:15:00 PM
Lovely thoughts Mike. Those words of yours are like cannonballs of fire,decimating the hills.Full marks. Rgds, Prince
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Date: 9/23/2009 9:00:00 AM
This is a wonderful couplet Michael, I think the changes to part one is part of the process that Brian is looking for, for as we rewrite and add some things change for the better to make the whole a better piece, the flow is wonderful and content is outstanding! Good luck with Brians contest/experiment! ~Trudy~
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Date: 9/21/2009 1:11:00 PM
Great job, Michael..you have covered the colors and perception beautifully! ~ love, Carrie
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Date: 9/21/2009 12:12:00 PM
Many colours and an excellent multi-coloured presentation , MJ . Best of luck in the contest ..
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Date: 9/20/2009 10:22:00 PM
Nice work MJ, best of luck in the contest...Raul
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Date: 9/20/2009 7:06:00 PM
Great write, MJ. Especially love the way you end the poem with "God's rainbow leads to streets of gold." I think you have a winner! Love, Carolyn
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