Ordinary

he said, "I am an ordinary stone" ~ in one nocturnal rendezvous and vanished in sky's tenebrosity before her hands could reach to embrace him ~ a gentle gypsy wind dulcified her dolesome heart and set her to slumber a shooting star arrowed in elegiac ebony evening~ and as she opened her eyes she found a stone that dazzled midst the darkest night behind her 10 May 2022 A Brian Srrand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest 8th Place

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/4/2022 2:27:00 PM

Your poetry is purely magical, thank you for softening my heart tonight

Susan Lawrence

Date: 7/22/2022 10:35:00 AM

Wow lovely, luminous and so emotional in its expression JCB ! A belated congratulations on your win . So eloquent. I love it . Blessings, Susan :)

Ann Peck

Date: 6/10/2022 8:18:00 AM

I love your poem, JCB ~ especially the first stanza, and your title is perfect.

Timothy Ray

Date: 6/8/2022 1:07:00 PM

loved the language and the realization the ordinary has its deepest roots in the extraordinary....

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/3/2022 1:11:00 AM

Superb writing JBC! Your poetry always impresses my friend. I loved your ending in the spark of light you give her with these lines “she found a stone that dazzled midst the darkest night behind her”. Your talent shines bright on this poetry site. Almost forgot to congratulate you. Hugs, Connie xxoo

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/31/2022 1:42:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. What a "Wonderful" story/write. Have a blessed day writing away....................

John Watt

Date: 5/29/2022 11:06:00 PM

Beautiful poetic imagery, J. I love "in elegiac ebony evening~" so much. Congrats for your win, a Fave for me to enjoy over and over ~ John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2022 8:53:00 AM

well, that is certain not ordinary! Splendid wordage!!

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/14/2022 9:07:00 AM

Mysterious and beautiful. Well written :)

Valsa George

Date: 5/11/2022 9:08:00 PM

This is nothing ordinary..... but coming close to "Excellent" ! Congratulations dear friend for our deserving win !

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/10/2022 10:02:00 AM

JCB, this is a verbal delight of images! Mystic and mystical! There is a powerful magic in your lines drawing me in to a gorgeous scene. Many congratulations on your win! This is a fav for me dear friend like a melody floating through my mind! Blessings!

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/10/2022 2:24:00 PM

Thank you dear friend. Your warm appreciation is very inspiring enough and your fave? I am greatly overwhelmed and grateful. More power to you. ^JCB

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/10/2022 7:14:00 AM

Great story. Congratulations!

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/10/2022 2:21:00 PM

Thank you Alex. More blessings to you.^JCB

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/10/2022 4:40:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Your poems are subtle, and picturesque - showing the brilliant artist in you. To my faves. Love ~ Mala

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/10/2022 2:21:00 PM

Thank you dear Mala..and for the fave, I am greatly honoured. All the best. ^JCB