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One To One Poem-2

One to one poem From the far sky, the lone sun rules the earth Of heat and light it's not at all in dearth But what all it gives birth to may not so stand For it is all messed up by man’s hands. Love is what one yearns to get all the time It’s for free like heat and light in all climes Why at all is love so hard to come by Does it at the sight of man try to fly? To try to fit in and live a tight life In this man made mess is to go through strife Like when one wants to make up a cute verse With words of one sound which makes it quite terse. 14th Jan 13 Form: Couplet (made up of only monosyllabic words) For David’s “One to one “ contest

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Date: 1/30/2013 9:30:00 PM
Jag, a very nice win in David's "one to one" contest~ :-) PD
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Date: 1/28/2013 10:00:00 AM
Great rhymes! You picked some really interesting monosyllabic words. Congrats!
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Date: 1/27/2013 11:28:00 PM
I understand your message and agree Jag. Kudos on your win!
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Date: 1/27/2013 2:58:00 PM
Awesome and interesting piece,S.J...Congrats on your win in this contest...
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Date: 1/27/2013 1:09:00 PM
We do seem to make a mess by trying too hard. Simple is often best...and you did a wonderful job bringing that fact to life in one word stanzas!! Well done!
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Date: 1/27/2013 12:44:00 PM
congratulations on your HM
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Date: 1/27/2013 12:20:00 PM
Jag, congrats on your HM, a good message here...David
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Date: 1/22/2013 2:35:00 AM
This is so good Jag and sometime you are right with your last two lines ..kudos xx
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Date: 1/21/2013 7:20:00 AM
Great job... good luck in the contest, my dear Jag! Big hugs, Jack xox
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Date: 1/18/2013 10:37:00 PM
Jag, you could also say "with words of one sound" since with a hypen is better, but the other way would be absolutely ok. well, let me go see if you have any other recent poems I have not viewed yet!!
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Date: 1/18/2013 4:47:00 PM
Jag, you did a good job, but I feel like I should caution you. A hyphenated word is still one word and maybe the judge will not see your hyphenated words as one syllable words. I know you can replace with other words if you try!! Luv, andrea
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