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Oh, My Sweet Life

Oh, my sweet life, how magnificent you are! Roaming near and far, conspicuous like a star Basking in sunshine with the stroke of light Cherishing evermore memories of the night, You breathe fragrant air cleansing my despair Mystical messenger, you're hope in my prayer Blooming earthly garden's vivacious flowers Guarding my corner bearing special powers, Why then you hide when joy comes to knock Sending me to traverse hills of random walk Failing to find a way that shows me my path Causing me to meander mired in your wrath, Don't take me north if south is shining warm Whirling fresh breeze before churning storm Hiding darker thunder behind cotton clouds Blocking my sunshine forming misty shrouds, Meet me in my dream, taking a gallant stand Waking in my dawn show me a winning hand Rising with my day, take me where bliss's rife Painting on my horizon secrets to happy life. July 14, 2018 Placed first in End of December 2018 contest by Brian Strand

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Valsa George

Date: 5/11/2022 8:42:00 AM

"Rising with my day, take me where bliss's rife Painting on my horizon secrets to happy life." This is everyone's prayer.... ! How beautifully you have voiced it ! Excellent imagery and striking diction, dear Wordsmith !

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/25/2018 10:01:00 AM

Hi Vijay, Oh such elegant words to tell of your sweet life my friend. Your words ever sing to the heart in their joy and peace. Your words paint such peace within my heart. I am so glad I stopped by and read this wonderful work today Vijay. As always my friend, such excellent poetic joy. A fave. Have a wonderful Thursday. Your friend always....Mike.

Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 10/9/2018 12:25:00 AM

Meet me in my dream, taking a gallant stand Waking in my dawn show me a winning hand Rising with my day, take me where bliss's rife Painting on my horizon secrets to happy life. Very well said, a lovely poem

Debjani Mitra

Date: 8/22/2018 11:09:00 AM

Your vocabulary is too good.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/16/2018 2:05:00 PM

Vijay, your poem so lovingly and vividly conveys the theme of life's--and emotions'-- extremes! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 5:04:00 PM

Thank you Janice.

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 7/16/2018 10:18:00 AM

A pleasure to follow your works. I was not disappointed about what you can do with this rhyming pattern, great work !

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/16/2018 1:37:00 PM

Thank you Kyle.

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 7/16/2018 2:30:00 AM

What a beautiful life indeed. Once again you wrote such a lyrical poem with such ease and elegance. Bless you Vijay and your life!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/16/2018 1:37:00 PM

Thank you Kudzai.

Chris Hagy

Date: 7/15/2018 8:13:00 PM

Beautiful, wonderful prayer of life Vijay :) It can be a sweet life if the spirit is darkness free :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/16/2018 1:37:00 PM

Thank you Chris.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/15/2018 6:38:00 PM

Oh if we could but steer life in the direction WE want it to go. But it sure can throw strange roadblocks in our path. Enjoyed this metaphorical poem.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/16/2018 1:36:00 PM

Thank you Andrea.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 7/15/2018 3:40:00 PM

Beautiful rhyme, it's more like a Masnavi...

Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/18/2018 2:18:00 AM

You bet...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/15/2018 4:56:00 PM

Thank you Pashang.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/15/2018 3:24:00 PM

I like how you painted the picture of the sweet life.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/15/2018 4:56:00 PM

Thank you Richard.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/15/2018 3:32:00 AM

An enriched life blessed by divine light is what our soul yearns for! Your profound and wondrous poem invites one to reevaluate his approach of life! Excellent my friend, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/15/2018 3:11:00 PM

Thank you my friend...appreciate your comments.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/14/2018 4:45:00 PM

So well written Vijay and I love the ending. Wishing you happiness and bliss :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:52:00 PM

Thank you for the good wishes Heidi...though written in first person, the poem is not about me. Hopefully something in there rings true for some. Always appreciate your support.

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/14/2018 4:04:00 PM

Love this Vijay, reads like a classic of old.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:49:00 PM

Very kind of you Harry..many thanks for your feedback.

Lyric Man

Date: 7/14/2018 3:23:00 PM

Vijay, I notice something very significant in your Sweet Life write.. you NEVER lose control. Even when faced with harsh circumstance. When things hit outside of your command, you control what your response will be. A man controlled is a man who will, no matter what, live a sweet life!!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:49:00 PM

I share your sentiments..many thanks LM for your comments.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/14/2018 3:15:00 PM

- This gives the reader a beautiful feeling, Vijay - Enjoy reading ... the joy of life :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:48:00 PM

Always happy to read your comments..many thanks Anne-Lise.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/14/2018 1:35:00 PM

the wonder of sweet life splendidly expressed within your lyrical lines, vijay... huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:47:00 PM

Appreciate the kind words..thank you nette.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/14/2018 10:21:00 AM

I believe you have captured the secrets Vijay, peace be with you my friend...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:47:00 PM

Thank you Charlie..appreciate your support.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/14/2018 9:47:00 AM

Vijay, this morning it was a pleasure reading this lovely piece! What a beautiful reflection of a sweet life! You are the master of love and beauty! Hugs. Pandita

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:46:00 PM

Thank you my friend--always happy to read your comments.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/14/2018 8:23:00 AM

Vijay, I enjoyed this so much! A great way to start the day, dear friend!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:46:00 PM

So kind of you Kim..many thanks for your visit and feedback.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 7/14/2018 8:23:00 AM

Ah, you breathed this one out like a pro. I admire such vivacity and verve. Thank you for sharing. ItT was a delight to read. Have a wonderful day dear poet/friend .

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:45:00 PM

A pleasure to read your comments..many thanks, Pixie.

Arturo Michael

Date: 7/14/2018 7:50:00 AM

A lovely desire written in poem...unfortunately life leads us through its maze before we see the glory...Nice write Vijay...All the best my friend

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2018 4:45:00 PM

Yes--life has a plan..many thanks Arutro--appreciate your comments.