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My Tell-Tale Heart- a Twist On Poe

It wasn’t that I’d done you wrong I welcomed you into my heart’s home I cherished you And I fed you I protected you I let you dream your dreams In comfort In safety And I loved you You were my own And yet…. Day upon day You waited for the opportunity To confess Knowing it would kill me Knowing I would bleed You had a perverse pleasure In planning…. To murder my heart And I never had a clue I trusted you You planned…you observed And all the while you smiled Acting sweet and caring Checking on me Making sure my needs were met And then Out of nowhere Like lightning You struck my unsuspecting heart Rammed the dagger in deep And twisted Twisted To make sure All the blood was spilt Satisfied and sure of yourself You hid your gruesome work Underneath layers of indifference Buried Or so you thought But every now and then You hear it I know….I can see it on your face You hear the beating of my heart My tell-tale heart It still beats for you It’s still alive You try to deaden it The noise It’s driving you mad As you wine and dine her You try to make love to her More vigorously than before More often More intensely But as she is screaming your name Begging you for more In the crescendo of passion You heart it The beating of my heart It drowns out her voice It drowns out everything It pounds in your head You can’t go on Angry You leave her wanting As you run out of the room screaming… “STOP IT I hear your cry I killed your love Why do you still haunt me?” Beat after beat after beat My heart is still alive You feel it You are drawn to it She notices They notice You are agitated Something is driving you mad It’s me You remember my goodness My smile...my bed...my scent my love...my body...my warmth That pounding in your head Is desire for me It gets louder…LOUDER As you walk over to where I stand With each quickened step The pounding intensifies Surely everyone must hear it You come closer The indifference gone from your face Love...Passion...Repentance I hear the beating Thundering in my own ears My love for you You are closer You put your head on my chest Your tears wet my blouse I run my hands through your hair As I whisper… “Listen… My Tell-Tale heart Is still beating for you!” Eileen Manassian Ghali

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/12/2013 11:49:00 AM
I've never read the Poe poem (though I have heard of it). Still this is marvelous work. I don't know whether to feel sympathy for the one that killed your love... or wish him the cruelest punishment. This, for me, is what makes writing really intriguing. When the line between the good guy and the bad guy is blurred... you can see both sides.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/12/2013 11:54:00 AM
Hey, Timothy! Please....do read the Tell Tale Heart! It is easy to find on the internet...and then re-read this. It will make so much more sense! Hugs! BTW...thanks for stopping by!
Date: 4/5/2013 7:02:00 PM
If you think this is going to make me feel guilty Auntie................ it has lol. This is a great poem, love it. I think you captured the essence of Poe perfectly here. Take care, Regards Richard
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 4/5/2013 9:28:00 PM
Thanks, Richard. So glad that you enjoy reading my work! A good dose of guilt now and then is a good thing! :)
Date: 3/29/2013 12:59:00 PM
Hi Eileen I answered your question tomy Questionku
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Date: 3/28/2013 7:39:00 AM
This is weird, I commented on this poem yesterday and there is no comment here. Let's hope this one works. This is a powerful poem, it speaks to how people can make the same mistake over again. Still the heart wants what the heart wants. It made me think of my mom who kept going back to my dad, he was a bad boy and she was drawn to him. Some how he was also drawn to her. I was proud when she finally escaped.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 1:15:00 PM
Thanks for the comment, Richard. It does take a great deal of courage and fortitude to be able to walk away. I'm glad your Mom was able to do that. Hope you have a good day.
Date: 3/28/2013 6:15:00 AM
I love tell-tale heart...and I love this! I honored that you enjoyed my prose so much. Thank you!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 1:13:00 PM
It was a great piece, Caleb. Thanks for the visit! :)
Date: 3/27/2013 4:03:00 PM
very powerful and piercing - nice!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:28:00 AM
Thanks, sweet Ilene! hugs!
Date: 3/27/2013 1:32:00 PM
'In the crescendo of passion'-l liked this line. But then the whole poem is pounding with passionate and persistent whispers and tears...Great write!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:29:00 AM
Thanks so much, Ndaba. Heading your way to get acquainted! :)
Date: 3/27/2013 11:17:00 AM
wow hot, a woven story of a heartfelt tell tale heart, this is wonderful poetry Eileen...
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:30:00 AM
Thanks, so much, Harry. Been reading up on you...your poems and blogs...and fav poems and poets. :) Glad to read your comment.
Date: 3/27/2013 8:33:00 AM
Brilliant exposé of a broken heart and how it can mend coz sometimes love doesn't die... it just sleeps and lays in waiting! I repeat, brilliant Eileen! Hugs, Jack xox
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:27:00 AM
HI JACK! Always good to hear from you! :) JACK...you just gave me an idea for a poem with your comment! Priceless. Hugs!

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