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May Showers

May showers Her long hair draped around her shoulders clinging, small rivulets of rain, soft caress, a flood of little luke warm waves Her legs slowly move while the tune plays through her head, spring music soft green notes blossom on trees Her arms encompass herself as if dancing with April, in early sprung sunlight between drowsy daisies that open their amber eyes in white delight, And she raises her head, and welcomes the water, as rainbows welcome rain and sun. May showers and smiles. *** May 7, 2017 N/A in contest: May Showers Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron

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Jan Allison

Date: 5/9/2017 1:30:00 PM

Very ambiguous imagery Darren I read it as a lady called May having a shower but your personification could make it about the season... really enjoyed!:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 5/9/2017 1:37:00 PM

I leave it entirely to you to figure out what it actually is Jan ;)

Phillip Garcia

Date: 5/9/2017 5:45:00 AM

Deliberately ambiguous, eh? I see right through your deliberarions to a beautiful poem ripe with beauty and rich in clarity. Soft green notes blossom on trees is wonderful, very subtle in the way its folded into the flowing waltz you've created here. It's 5:45 officially, so I suppose that means this is a serious comment. Well done, kiddo

Darren White
Date: 5/9/2017 5:52:00 AM

of course, we can't have deliberarions running around unfettered.

Darren White
Date: 5/9/2017 5:49:00 AM

Time to wake up, mr. Garcia ;) Thank you for this wonderful comment. And you are right, it didn't start off ambiguous, but after two people commented below that it is a personification, I started reading it with different eyes. And it could be a personification, in a way, but it indeed most definitely didn't start as one.

Phillip Garcia
Date: 5/9/2017 5:46:00 AM

Deliberarions meaning deliberations, of course

Elissa Quigley

Date: 5/8/2017 1:28:00 PM

This is an amazing write. I added it to my favorites. I love that it could be a personification, or actually about someone showering... Who knows... ^-^ good write!!

Darren White
Date: 5/8/2017 1:32:00 PM

Thanks Elissa, I kept it deliberately ambiguous :) Thanks for the fav!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/8/2017 5:46:00 AM

Afternoon Darren. Allow me to simply say this is wonderful and beautiful poetry. This is what poetry is all about. Well done entirely. Good luck with terhe contest. However this entry stands on its own. Have a wonderful afternoon.

Darren White
Date: 5/8/2017 5:54:00 AM

Hey Lisa, thank you :) We'll see what happens in the contest. Sometimes it's fun to write for a contest only to get inspiration for something.

White Wolf

Date: 5/7/2017 8:37:00 PM

Oh, this is special! And no doubt it shall do well in the contest!

Darren White
Date: 5/8/2017 12:31:00 AM

Thanks Budgie, we'll see. We can never look inside the head of judges, they may not like it :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/7/2017 8:13:00 PM

This is a remarkable piece Darren. A winner in every respect. A 7:) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 5/8/2017 12:30:00 AM

Thank you so much Anne-Marie, also for the 7 :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/7/2017 4:01:00 PM

oh my, what lovely personification this is. One of the very best I have seen entered for this contest. It's so unique, Darren.

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 11:55:00 PM

Thanks Andrea!

Sara Ella

Date: 5/7/2017 9:10:00 AM

A celebration of Spring and all that it brings <3 My favorite daisies and sunshine. Beautiful poem Darren :)

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 9:40:00 AM

Happy you like it, we both like daisies :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/7/2017 8:38:00 AM

This is gorgeous Darren. 7 xomo

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 8:42:00 AM

Merci, ma mo :)

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 5/7/2017 8:24:00 AM

I totally agree with Maria, this is so beautiful. #7

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 8:42:00 AM

Elizabeth, thank you! Also for the 7 :)

Maria Williams

Date: 5/7/2017 7:09:00 AM

I love everything about this poem Darren, its so refreshing, so uplifting and moves so easily. A winner already , A 7++... Maria

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 8:41:00 AM

Maria, thank you so very much, also for the 7 :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/7/2017 4:02:00 AM

This is so lovely Darren. May is my favorite spring month. I love how you describe...drowsy daisies. This should be in the category of 'personification' instead of 'free verse'. I love everything about this poem my friend! Outstanding! 7; )

Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 4:06:00 AM

Connie, thank you! I like how you see it as a personification, I like it how everyone reads this differently :) But this is about a girl named May, showering, it didn't occur to me it could be read otherwise. I LOVE that, plus your 7.