Long Nights

Dark clouds hover over me nonstop. Rain continues to pour profusely. Rainbows don't exist in my world. The sun has taken a permanent vacation. Birds are mute and no longer sing. The rooster no longer informs me of a new dawn. I now live on Melancholy Lane. The moon has lost its glow; stars don't shine. Days don't exist, and nights are very long. When you left, my love, I became a permanent resident of Melancholy Lane. 4-11-2021 Contest: Anacreontic Verse Sponsor: Silent One

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/1/2021 9:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative/wonderful yet sad write. Sadness can take one over. Have a blessed day..................

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 7/29/2021 10:03:00 PM

Superb! Great metaphors to describe the theme. Congratulations!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/29/2021 4:03:00 PM

Well deserved TOP win my friend. BIG congrats, Alexis. I don't see your soup mail ICON. Wanted to tell you about your newest poem.

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/29/2021 5:00:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend. I will put my soup mail icon back so you can soup mail me:-)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/29/2021 12:06:00 PM

You skillfully express the despair of 'melancholy lane' with the absence of rainbows and mute birds, congratulations on your win in the contest~

Silent One

Date: 7/29/2021 6:45:00 AM

Sorry, I've not been around.. Not much free time at the moment, and that means not enough time for Poetry Soup... Thank you for writing for my contest and apologies it took so long to judge.. Congratulations on your placement...

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/29/2021 2:16:00 PM

Hi Silent, It's so good to see you here. I hope you will be here more. You hosted a good contest. I appreciate my placement:-) Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/12/2021 2:12:00 PM

wow, is this for Silent One's Contest? everyone is doing such great poetry in this form!! (yes, now i see it's for the contest) wonderful work!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/12/2021 8:33:00 AM

What a powerful write! No matter if is sad , it is wondrous poetry. Kudos dearest, Alexis. Hugs xxx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/12/2021 3:48:00 AM

Ahhh!! Sad one. I hope just a write and not true about your life. I will have to check out this form. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/12/2021 12:22:00 AM

Sad but very well done. Good luck with the contest.

Judy Ball

Date: 4/11/2021 11:18:00 PM

WoW! I hope this isn't true. Great entry for the contest though. Good luck. God Bless, JB

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/11/2021 10:17:00 PM

Beautiful in its sadness, Alexis, has great flow too, all the best:)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/11/2021 6:06:00 PM

So sad and expresses the feeling of loss, especially the loss of a mate or partner... so well. Beautifully done, dear lady. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Marilene Evans

Date: 4/11/2021 5:05:00 PM

So melancholy, yet no matter how long the night is... there would be dawn... even thou you don't hear the rooster. Great imagery, Alexis!

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/11/2021 3:56:00 PM

This sad and moody poem is a fine entry for the contest, Alexis. Your remarkable imagery has made sunless, songless, Melancholy Lane very real. Good luck in the contest. :) Evelyn

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/11/2021 12:57:00 PM

Alexis, this is a sad, but poignant piece of work. It is my hope, if it is personal, that the sun will soon shine again in your life. If not, you've succeeded in painting an incredible picture of gloom.

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/11/2021 12:54:00 PM

This Alexis of yours always does beautiful work, you've truly created a moving and creative poem in your usual fascinating imagery. We wish you the best of luck in the contest.