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Lament

The sun has set and evening falls. A silver sliver-moon hangs high above my house; behind its walls I’ve made my bed, and here I lie. I think of times star light, star bright, a girl who never questioned why she dreamed awake with all her might. I’ve made my bed and here I lie. Those wishes wished so long ago are still no closer than the sky that’s filled with summer stars aglow. I’ve made my bed and here I lie. And though I’m warm inside my room, long shadows of the night pass by my window shade and cast their gloom. I’ve made my bed and here I lie. How sensible, how dull my schemes! Beneath my comforter, I sigh remembering my tarnished dreams. I’ve made my bed, and here I lie. For JP Contest 5: Feelings (Feeling regret as a sense of loss and longing for someone or something gone or passed out of existence)

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Date: 5/1/2020 10:57:00 AM
I thought I had read this one before, but couldn't find it in your chapbooks. I thought I left a comment before, but I guess not, strange! Viv is right, this one will never date. Such perfect poetry and one I think most of us can relate to in those unfulfilled dreams of our youth. Believe it or not, I wanted to be a pro baseball player! Hugs ~ John
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Date: 4/29/2018 11:22:00 AM
Excellent, sadly. The style suits the sentiment, in it's wistful repetitveness. And it will never date. x
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Date: 8/2/2016 6:16:00 AM
Hey Andrea: Congratulations on your top placement. We can all relate to un-met expectations....oops I mean dreams....lol Love you, SuZ
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Date: 8/1/2016 10:50:00 AM
Wonderful poem my friend. Congrats on your superb win. A 7. Hugs, Cloudy Poet
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Date: 8/1/2016 12:55:00 AM
Nice one Andrea:) Just expresses my feelings right now:) Congratulations on your win:)
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Date: 7/31/2016 4:22:00 PM
A comforting cell our beds may be, but also a doorway to the stars...when we dream. This is a well placed poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/31/2016 2:19:00 PM
Howdy.........I've pondered enough///Time to paint again......Great piece of work!!!Love it!!!God Bless YOU my friend!!!!!
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Date: 7/30/2016 10:21:00 PM
Glad you reposted, I wasn't here for the first edition. Congratulations Andrea...
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Date: 7/30/2016 9:13:00 PM
Congratulations on THE top spot! Go, Andrea, go! (got sidetracked by family earlier and now just have a couple of minutes) ... CayCay
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Date: 7/30/2016 8:40:00 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on your win. Thank you for supporting my contest --- 101 in a row. :) Stop by my blog "They Hang Horses, Don't They?" if you'd like. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 7/30/2016 8:37:00 PM
Andrea, I know exactly how you feel on them tarnished dream. Love it. LINDA
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Date: 5/29/2014 10:51:00 AM
:) a challenging write noted with the quote.. I feel like the 2nd stanza though however I'm not this girl..:) rather I keep on going ..:) with hope determination and faith placed to actions..:) glad I choose this from your poems...:)GBU
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Date: 4/19/2014 8:05:00 AM
Andrea What a deep and powerful write. I could feel the emotional anguish in each line. Thank you for the sweet comment on my ESS Of Love poem.
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Date: 2/26/2014 7:33:00 PM
I am sure the dreams that share a bed with you. Realise they are a dream come true.
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Date: 2/19/2014 12:36:00 PM
I love this one. Great repetition of the final line. A cliche reinvented.
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Date: 2/19/2014 12:36:00 PM
I love this one. Great repetition of the final line. A cliche reinvented.
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Date: 12/26/2013 3:03:00 PM
The road not taken is one nobody knows. Whether high or whether low. Does it matter if no one goes? Peace. :)
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Date: 12/24/2013 7:31:00 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!! Merry, Merry Christmas To You And Your Family!!! Sara
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Date: 12/21/2013 3:45:00 PM
I like the way you used the quote. Most folks would have used the opposite approach, i.e taking chances, instead of describing wasted dreams. Congrats, Roy
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Date: 12/20/2013 7:50:00 PM
Hmmmm you don't sound too happy in that bed Petal. at least you have a new comforter in the shape of another win lol. Congratulations. Take care, Richard
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Date: 12/20/2013 4:12:00 AM
Enjoyed the write on the selected quote and congrats on the fine win, Andrea
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Date: 12/19/2013 8:53:00 PM
Andrea, , Congratulations on your awesome win... always~ LINDA
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Date: 12/19/2013 4:27:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea, a very deserve win for a very beautiful piece :3 hug, Yanny
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Date: 12/19/2013 2:34:00 PM
A wonderful job Andrea....went so well with the quote...congratulations
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Date: 12/19/2013 1:05:00 PM
that's beautiful congats
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