Kimo One

mighty waves crash against the rocky shore water splashes to the sky salty mist touches lips

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/11/2013 10:55:00 AM

I'm amazed by how Japanese forms there still are! I was under the assumption I've tried most of them... but still never heard of this one! It's a very dramatic image... I love it's sheer intensity... well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 2:43:00 PM

Thanks Tim, hopefully I did it right, there were no examples

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/11/2013 12:39:00 AM

this is so lovely, is it your first kimo?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2013 6:30:00 AM

Yep,

Heather Ober

Date: 6/10/2013 8:07:00 AM

It is probably obvious from my poetry that I LOVE the ocean. You really brought it to life here, and it made my morning! I'm with Eileen. 7+++

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2013 8:18:00 AM

Thanks Heather, yes it is obvious. I too am drawn to the ocean. I live by lake Okanagan not quite an ocean but I love it none the less.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/10/2013 7:35:00 AM

WOW!!!! AWESOME! 7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2013 7:40:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, hugs Rick