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Invisible presence Alone here, in this crowded room... Stars and starlets all around me, An invisible man without a clue, No one even knows my name If I leave, nothing here would change Alone here, in this star filled place I wonder, what I did to get me here... Empty stares leave without a trace, I could get up and walk away, I'm an invisible man anyway! Chorus Why do I feel, so invisible? I don't care, no, I don't care! Their haughty eyes with their shallow stares I don't care, no, I don't care! Alone here, gazing at these stars, but, when they look, they look right through me They won't show who they really are A humble man in a pride filled place When they look, they can't see my face Chorus Why do I feel, so invisible? I don't care, no, I don't care Their haughty eyes with their shallow stares I don't care, no, I don't care repeat chorus fade John Derek Hamilton February 20,2017

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Date: 4/22/2017 3:20:00 AM
Nice twist on the theme, John. Love the "haughty eyes with shallow stares" line. Best of luck for the contest. Regards, John.
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/22/2017 1:21:00 PM
Thanks for the visit and comment John, got an hm in the contest bty, guess he was looking for literal stargazing, my bad!
Date: 2/23/2017 9:54:00 PM
Wonderful lyrics, John...very emotive. I hear this as a rock ballad or soft rock song...well done and congrats! Hugs, Rhonda
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/24/2017 9:16:00 AM
Thanks Rhonda, coming from you, that a high compliment! I'm very pleased you like it, thanks for visiting my page! Soft rock is kinda what I had in mind!
Date: 2/22/2017 5:49:00 PM
awesome lyric dear John! You always rock at these and I swear I can hear the melodious tune linger when reading the words :) congrats :) -luloo
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/22/2017 8:12:00 PM
Thanks Luloo, really nice to hear from you!
Date: 2/22/2017 3:11:00 PM
In Ireland we say it's the quiet ones you have to watch. That seems certainly true with you John. Wonderful poem. Well done.
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/22/2017 3:25:00 PM
Thanks Jean, you don't have to worry with me!
Date: 2/20/2017 6:05:00 PM
Add an audio, I'd love to hear it as a song.
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/21/2017 6:37:00 AM
Read along while listening to George Harrison's, something in the way she moves. Was the inspiration. Thanks James
Date: 2/20/2017 3:21:00 PM
Interesting take on the prompt - good luck in the contest.
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/20/2017 5:02:00 PM
I was working on this song and it just happened to fit, thanks for the visit and comment!
Date: 2/20/2017 2:45:00 PM
Well done, John. No one likes to be "invisible". Funny how those liberal stars can be so fake.
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/20/2017 3:06:00 PM
I wouldn't know, it's a figment of my imagination, as if I would ever be there! lol Thanks for the visit Danny!
Date: 2/20/2017 1:55:00 PM
I think you captured the scene to perfection John - lovely lyrics:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/20/2017 2:01:00 PM
Thanks Jan, sometimes I don't know where these ideas come from, I just have to go with it. You know what I mean!
Date: 2/20/2017 1:02:00 PM
Great one John!! Good luck in the contest :)
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John Hamilton
Date: 2/20/2017 1:12:00 PM
Thanks Heidi, you're getting around a lot of my poems, I appreciate that!

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