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 December 9, 2020
            Inspired by " Story From Your Childhood" Premiere Poetry Contest
                             Sponsor: L Milton Hankins

travelling in a train - an overnight journey, my mother, my sister, me, and my father. my father had an interview with a prestigious company,  received a first-class ticket for himself, but we didn't!  he exchanged the ticket with a complete stranger, and got into the same compartment with us. but didn't have a seat for himself. ignored his own suffering...nothing unusual for a man who bravely bore the burden of an uprooted family, devastated by partition of their motherland!  chilly wintry midnight, each and every passenger under thick blankets, sleeping heavily,  I heard... boom..boom...boom!  sound of the wheels hitting the railway track - crossing the bridge of river Kaveri!  that booming sound startled me, made me open my eyes,  and I found my exhausted father standing in front of me, alone - awfully sleepy,  holding an iron-bar for support,  eyes half-closed, all night!  somehow managed to find a comfortable space for us!  to a six-year old,  that was the moment she wondered - who was more kind - God, or Her Father! Reference: Kaveri is a river in the southern part of India.

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Date: 1/22/2024 10:16:00 PM
"that was the moment she wondered - who was more kind - God, or Her Father!" - indeed, a tale of true life experience. Beautifully written. I had read it once earlier also. Congratulations!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 1/22/2024 10:43:00 PM
Thanks, Christuraj. Yes, this poem was written a few years ago. I was very much close to my father, who was a strong and brave man, but at the same time kind and generous! He was always my hero !
Date: 1/22/2024 12:22:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a powerful story/write with a great ending. Love It... A dad's love was here. Have a blessed day/week..................
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 1/22/2024 1:38:00 PM
Dearest Paula, So delighted to see your kindest comment. This is a true story - and I was very much of a "father's Daughter"! Thank you for reading my poem.
Date: 6/13/2021 10:54:00 PM
Excellent Write. i also always witnessed my Dad to bear the burden of family with strong determination and affection.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 1/22/2024 1:40:00 PM
Dear Anisha, Sorry for replying after a long time! Sounds like you were a "Father's Daughter" like me. It's a very special bond for lifetime!
Date: 6/10/2021 4:27:00 PM
Your dad was obviously a very tender hearted and loving man. This is a beautiful write, and an amazing tribute to your dad.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/10/2021 4:59:00 PM
Thank you for reading my poem - your inspiring comments mean a lot to me. Really appreciate. Best wishes ~ Mala
Date: 6/9/2021 6:15:00 AM
Sincerest congratulations Malabika on well written very beautiful poem. Your father's love is a reflection of God the Father Who is love and those who love are always with God and each other.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/9/2021 5:28:00 PM
Very very beautiful comment. You are absolutely right - “ Your father’s love is the reflection of God the Father” - how true and profound! Thank you for reading and leaving such a thoughtful comment. Best wishes~ Mala
Date: 6/5/2021 12:25:00 PM
Great poem!! the story is superb and it is true!! Yes! a great father too! Hope he did well in the interview and got the job!!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/5/2021 3:26:00 PM
Thank you, Krish. Yes, Krish - my father was brilliant, and a very confident man. In his own words - "I had never been to an interview where I wasn't offered the job!" Wish I had inherited his confidence! Really appreciate your kind words. BW ~ Mala
Date: 6/4/2021 3:20:00 PM
wow, what a wonderful self-sacrificing man! I can't imagine my own husband doing that or maybe not even myself!! (though I often can't sleep so I might do it just because it would not be difficult for me!) Love this example poem you gave us
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/5/2021 9:43:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. Yes, I was fortunate to have a kind father, but unfortunately he spent his life sacrificing for not only his own, but also his extended family. Appreciate your comment so much - you are a special, kind woman - a rare gem. Love and BW ~ Mala
Date: 6/4/2021 3:54:00 AM
That was so sacrificial for him, Malabika, God was kind to bless you with such a kind dad, great memories:) my dad too is really a blessing to me:)
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/4/2021 5:17:00 AM
Thank you, Jo, for reading my poem. Yes, Dear Friend, God was kind to me to be blessed with my kind father, especially being born in a generation when women were not treated equally. I was fortunate. Very nice to know about your father too. Love and best wishes ~ Mala
Date: 12/11/2020 9:25:00 PM
Beautiful story of a father's selfless love, Mala, a wonderful metaphor for heavenly love. The story flows from one line to another. So nicely done. Congratulations on your win my dear friend.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/12/2020 1:33:00 PM
Thank you, Sam. Appreciate your kind and thoughtful words. Love ~ Mala
Date: 12/11/2020 11:40:00 AM
what a precious memory ~ you must have a beautiful relationship.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/11/2020 11:44:00 AM
I had the most amazing memories of a father-daughter relationship. Thank you so much, Dear Poet.
Date: 12/11/2020 5:45:00 AM
Congratulations dear Mala. Your dad was truly the epitome of a perfect father. You're such a lucky daughter.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/11/2020 5:55:00 AM
Thanks so much, JCB. It's true - I am a lucky daughter. As usual your comments are full of kindness. Really appreciate. Love ~ Mala
Date: 12/11/2020 4:06:00 AM
No doubt, Malabika... your dad was the true hero! Nice story :) Congratulations on your winning placement! Charlie
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/11/2020 5:54:00 AM
Thank you, Charles. Really appreciate your thoughtful comments. Best wishes ~ Mala
Date: 12/10/2020 9:11:00 PM
True that Malabika....Our Dad's are the real hero's in our stories....Congrats on your win :)
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/11/2020 5:53:00 AM
Thank you, Carol, that's so true. Really appreciate your loving comment.
Date: 12/9/2020 11:53:00 AM
Hello Mala, well i would say both God and father. Both kind. Love Darlene your friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 12/10/2020 12:07:00 PM
Hello Mala, hi! How are things going? yes I thought it would be both. Enjoy your day my friend. Love Darlene
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 12/9/2020 5:05:00 PM
Hello My Friend Darlene, You are right. Both are the kindest. Hugs~ Mala
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