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I'M Drowning

I'm immersed-              the tides pull me under, and all I can do from sinking is... still love you- there is no saving me from       suffocating, when all I do is hold on. I'm submerged- pebbles of bloodshed under my toes, and all I can do from sinking is... remember your touch. you're swimming,                     I'm drowning...                                   into love's deep blue. September 16, 2017

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Date: 9/18/2017 9:21:00 AM
Truly exceptional and beautiful verse my friend. Perfect ending, to convey love and deep longing.. Adding to my fav list.
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Date: 9/17/2017 12:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Luloo! Janice
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Date: 9/17/2017 8:44:00 AM
Congrats on your placement, luloo. This is lovely.
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Date: 9/17/2017 6:56:00 AM
Laura, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful poem
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Date: 9/17/2017 4:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Laura. A lovely touching poem.
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Date: 9/16/2017 10:17:00 AM
nice! i liked that i actually saw a scene from the Titanic movie as i read through; good descriptions and i felt a lost romance theme too. cheers!
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