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If I Shopped For My Spouse Like I Shop For My Automobile

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My man was old and battered and was destined for the scrap heap He’d failed his annual MOT as his many defects ran far too deep His motor was still running but he had an intermittent fault He’d nod off when we were making love – (I’d feel a sudden jolt!) His once full head of blonde gleaming hair Can be polished, as it now it’s thinning there With aching joints that my man once trusted He needed a service as his parts were rusted So I took him to the used man showroom to see what they could do They gave him full service to see if his parts they could renew They said he still had many miles to go and they no longer made this model But if I had his engine repaired he’d be going at full throttle The trusty mechanics worked day and night To ensure that his engine was running just right They polished his body, now you should see it shine He’s back to how he was now his motor is just fine!!! If I’d trawled the showrooms would I want to replace The one who’d stuck by me and kept a smile on my face I’ve no wish to trade him in or keep him as a spare After many years together there’s bound to be wear and tear! FUN FICTION WRITE FOR THE CONTEST! IF I SHOPPED FOR MY SPOUSE LIKE I SHOP FOR MY AUTOMOBILE CONTEST Sponsored by Cindi Rockwell

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Date: 1/16/2021 10:03:00 AM
Beautifully fun and true. Loved it!
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Date: 10/18/2016 10:39:00 PM
Any second hand refurbished models on sale there?
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2016 5:19:00 AM
I've not been back since lol:-) :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/16/2016 3:53:00 PM
Coming back with congrats, Jan. Agnes
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Date: 10/19/2016 5:19:00 AM
Thanks again Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/16/2016 1:16:00 PM
Great poem, Jan! Congrats on your win. Janice
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Date: 10/19/2016 5:19:00 AM
Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/16/2016 1:10:00 PM
lol! you rock Jan! Your humor is the best! I am so laughing right now-congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 10/19/2016 5:18:00 AM
Thanks LuLoo I wasn't sure how to do the contest so went for humour:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/18/2016 8:55:00 PM
Good poem, very amusing
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2016 2:17:00 AM
Thanks Gwen:-) I had fun with this one:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/18/2016 3:52:00 PM
And that attitude is just right As with his agility, one day he may yet surprise.
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Date: 9/19/2016 2:17:00 AM
Many thanks Ritu:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/17/2016 9:03:00 AM
Oh a fave dear Jan.Your poetry is so entertaining.: ) :)
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Date: 9/17/2016 10:41:00 AM
Thanks so much Charma I do like to bring a smile if I can:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/16/2016 1:42:00 PM
That was fun :) Good luck with the contest, Jan. Agnes
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Date: 9/16/2016 2:19:00 PM
Thanks Agnes its quite a challenge to write for the contest I really enjoyed your poem:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 9/16/2016 11:48:00 AM
Love this write comparing him to a car and how you did not trade him in but depended on the old reliable one. love phyl Going into my fav.
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Date: 9/16/2016 11:53:00 AM
Aww thanks Phyllis - just a fun write for the contest - would never trade my hubby in for a newer model:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/15/2016 5:49:00 PM
Lol great write vintage better less trouble
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:57:00 PM
Yes lol I agree lol:-)Hope it's not tooo cheeky a poem for the sponsor lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/15/2016 5:42:00 PM
Excellent Jan! You have an oldie but a goodie on your hands and one who has been steadfast by your side. I love how you created this piece that is sure to garner great notice! : ) 7
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:45:00 PM
Its not my hubby lol I found the pic on the web and it fitted the poem especially with the lack of hair lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/15/2016 5:44:00 PM
I couldn't resist this fun write Connie:-) hugs Jan xx
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/15/2016 5:43:00 PM
Oh, I just saw his picture. He is handsome too! : )

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