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I'd like to feel something again - KIB



In whirl and twirl we waltz around
Feeling guised and chastised
Raising brick laden walls
Going 'bout our daily business
Foiled and desensitized
Veil plagued of apathy



 “I think we miss that touch so much, that we crash into each other, just so we can feel something." Crash, 2004

Submitted on August 3, 2019, for contest KEEP IT BRIEF sponsored by NETTE ONCLAUD

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Date: 8/6/2019 3:22:00 PM
to build the walls to guard the pain, we cannot feel touch within...love the train of thought in this one....nicely penned :) hugs
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Date: 8/6/2019 3:52:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra. Most appreciated.
Date: 8/5/2019 6:22:00 PM
me too
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Date: 8/5/2019 7:27:00 PM
LOL
Date: 8/4/2019 6:01:00 PM
"foiled and desensitized" - this describes life perfectly these days. I wonder if Crash might be a magazine?
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Date: 8/4/2019 6:28:00 PM
Crash is an AWESOME movie. It won movie of the year actually in 2004.
Date: 8/3/2019 5:07:00 PM
So dense with flowing feelings, beautifully done, much luck in the contest, Line.
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Date: 8/3/2019 8:47:00 PM
Thank you so much, Michelle. Most appreciated.
Date: 8/3/2019 1:01:00 PM
Great use of this form! Brevity helps us to ponder a concise point! Well done!
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Date: 8/3/2019 1:40:00 PM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Kim.