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I Miss You Big Brother Potd

Remember when we were young, you and I Bit of boyish mischief we used to cause The swearing, pushing, shoving, and punches We'd put on the charm when it came to mom Bit of boyish mischief we used to cause You, big brother, I followed and looked up to We'd put on the charm when it came to mom Inseparable, we stood by one another You, big brother, I followed and looked up to We went our different paths as we grew Inseparable, we stood by one another I miss the fun times when we were kids We went our different paths as we grew The swearing, pushing, shoving, and punches I miss. The fun times when we were kids Remember when we were young, you and I 2/8/2020 A plain Pantoum not a rhyming pantoum Contest Name PANTOUM Sponsored By: Line Gauthier February 10, 2020 POTD Typically a pantoum is made up of two rhyming couplets, however, Western writers altered and adapted the form, the importance of rhyming and brevity diminished. So, pantoums do not need to rhyme.

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Date: 2/29/2020 5:34:00 PM
Congratulations for your win Eve! :)
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Date: 2/29/2020 11:54:00 AM
Hi Eve, back to say congratulations on your winning placement. I loved this pantoum when I first read it and got to love it all over again!
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Date: 2/27/2020 12:06:00 PM
Congratulations, Eve. A great one, I always look for a restatement in the repetition and celebrate your lines 12 and 15. It's not easy to do.
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Date: 2/24/2020 9:38:00 PM
Eve, great reflection. I like how you set the stage for your memory to come back to life even if just for a moment to share with us. It was like reading a book. The poem I had written for my oldest brother a few years back was the hardest poem I had ever written. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful memory. Peace and blessings.
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Date: 2/18/2020 11:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD Eve. I loved your pantoum when I first read it and it is wonderful to see it recognized as a POTD.
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Date: 2/16/2020 8:40:00 AM
I miss my brother, but he was not who I thought he was. I love that your was... excellent write. Well deserving of a win. :) You are wonderful. Ann
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Date: 2/12/2020 2:50:00 PM
I can see that. Oh how fond we remember former days and especially when the days feel cold. Congratulations, Eve, on POTD!
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Date: 2/12/2020 5:28:00 AM
Fabulous Pantoum, Eve. Congrats on POTD. hugs x
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Date: 2/12/2020 4:27:00 AM
That is a great tribute to your brother. I must try to write a pantoum. Kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 2/11/2020 8:52:00 PM
What a great pantoum and tribute to your brother, to you, and to the relationship! Really well-crafted and woven, Eve! Kudos, Gershon
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Date: 2/11/2020 2:01:00 PM
Congratulations re p.o.t.d. Eve! Such a lovely poem, reminiscing on past years and the bond there was between you and your brother. Regards & Hugs // paul
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Date: 2/11/2020 10:05:00 AM
A lovely nostalgic window into the past Eve. I have an older brother I have lost contact with, we are searching for, and I can relate. Congratulations on having this wonderful tribute to your brother honored with POTD! xxoo
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Date: 2/11/2020 12:45:00 AM
Exquisitely crafted Eve. Congrats on your POTD, well-deserved ~ John
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Date: 2/10/2020 10:44:00 PM
Hi Eve, This is a good tribute piece to your big brother. The love that you two shared was evident in this write. Congratulations on getting the poem of day. I wish you the best of luck in the contest as well:-) Alexis
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Date: 2/10/2020 7:46:00 PM
There is no one like a big brother. You not only lose him, but a bit of yourself as well. The memories held in your heart, are forever. A heartfelt loving tribute. A special POTD.
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Date: 2/10/2020 4:01:00 PM
Family is very important. I know you miss your brother. I can feel your heart in every word. Memories will always take you back- to yesterday. Congratulations Eve, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy
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Date: 2/10/2020 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTD. Good write. My baby brother just passed away. Brothers are great. Enjoy your day.........
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Date: 2/10/2020 12:35:00 PM
The days of youth...of only we could relive them... congratulations Eve
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Date: 2/10/2020 12:29:00 PM
A super Pantoum and lovely tribute to your brother:-) I have never tried a non rhyming pantoum, you write them very well, many congratulations on your POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/10/2020 10:58:00 AM
Many congratulations Eve with your POTD. I really enjoyed it. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 2/10/2020 9:31:00 AM
Eve, a wonderful, heartfelt poem. Congratulations on POTD. Warmest Wishes~ Warren
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Date: 2/10/2020 9:26:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD. I was the youngest out of 5. Your poem brings back a lot of good memories for me. Good luck on the contest my friend. Well done!
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Date: 2/10/2020 8:43:00 AM
Congratulations Eve on POTD. I had the best big brother but I buried him 25 years ago.
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Date: 2/10/2020 8:24:00 AM
Eve a wonderful honor that you were awarded POTD and a wonderful poem you have penned. Congratulations. Kudos my friend. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/10/2020 7:41:00 AM
Congrats Eve on poem of the day--a poem hugging love and emotions.
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