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Haiku 43 - shell fragments

on a white sand beach lie scattered fragments of shells-- my unfulfilled dreams
6/28/15 For Shadow Hamilton's "Traditional Haiku" contest

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Date: 7/1/2015 8:59:00 PM
Good first 2 lines Kim, you need a strong third line based in fact ex: my wedding ring falls. [somehow SHOW an unfulfilled dream-see?] Light & Love
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:37:00 PM
Thanks for stopping by Debbie! I appreciate your help and knowledge of haiku. How do you keep all the different variables in mind? I'll keep on trying. I'm determined to get it right!
Date: 7/1/2015 7:17:00 PM
Congrats Kim...a wonderfully wistful winner
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:34:00 PM
Thank you, David!
Date: 7/1/2015 4:29:00 AM
Ah Kim a wonderful haiku n so is the win! Big congrats!
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:33:00 PM
Thank you so much, Upma!
Date: 7/1/2015 12:54:00 AM
Kim, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA
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Date: 7/1/2015 9:32:00 PM
Thank you, Linda!
Date: 7/1/2015 12:37:00 AM
Lovely, lacrimose Haiku, Kim. Congrats, Viv x
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:31:00 PM
Thank you, Viv! I had to look up that word in the dictionary. I'd never heard it before.
Date: 7/1/2015 12:11:00 AM
nice win. SK
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:28:00 PM
Thank you, Skat!
Date: 6/30/2015 7:05:00 PM
A tinge of melancholic sadness in a Haiku. congrats on the win.
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Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:27:00 PM
Thank you, John!
Date: 6/30/2015 4:55:00 PM
Kim,congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:56:00 PM
Thank you, Eve!
Date: 6/30/2015 4:32:00 PM
Isn't this beautiful, Kim!! Congratulations on a most deserved win. All the best. // paul
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:55:00 PM
Thank you so much, Paul! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 6/30/2015 1:38:00 PM
congrats, for me this was probably the most amazing one on the list.
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:54:00 PM
Thank you, again, Andrea!
Date: 6/30/2015 1:15:00 PM
beautiful Kim congrats on 8th place hugs
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:53:00 PM
Thank you for my placement, Shadow!
Date: 6/29/2015 11:37:00 AM
this is pure haiku , of the metaphorical ilk. I LOVE it.
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:52:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! I'm still not totally sure what's acceptable in haiku. Your comment is very encouraging.
Date: 6/28/2015 7:07:00 PM
nice one, kim! good luck in the contest!
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:49:00 PM
Thank you, Ilene! Glad you like it.
Date: 6/28/2015 12:19:00 PM
- I wish I was there, lovely haiku Kim - Good luck in contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kim Merryman
Date: 6/28/2015 4:17:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise! Appreciate you stopping by.