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Grayer Grays, of Fractured Lives

The older I got my youth washed away through the frozen waterfalls and cold rocks, tripping on moss waiting for the next day. Nurturing was fictional to the flocks of starving young, instead steel chains and locks. Famished for affection we wanted to be scooped up in loving arms, kissed goodnight, teased and played with, and had fun things to do. Father worked very hard, came home then right out at night, glad that we were out of sight. The fights were horrendous over money; we shook like leaves over our father's wrath. Never any jokes, nothing was funny, always had to cope with the aftermath. We loved him, though we stayed out of his path. Love is meant to be warm and breathtaking, when nonexistent it is heartbreaking. 1/24/2018 Poetry Contest: 'A STUNNER JANUARY 2018' Sponsored By: Line Gauthier

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Date: 3/21/2018 12:06:00 AM
Congratulations, Eve on your fine win.
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Date: 3/19/2018 5:11:00 PM
What a sad, bitter memory you told so well in your poem. Congrats on your win, Eve.
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Date: 3/19/2018 2:57:00 PM
Indeed, so very sad, Eve. But how well you brought your emotion to us with this well-written poem. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/18/2018 11:22:00 AM
Eve, congratulations on sharing this insightful and sad poem. It's a well-deserved win for you in this contest. All my very best to you. :) Bartholomew
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Date: 3/18/2018 8:28:00 AM
Very sad, Eve. Some parents don't realize that material things are not going to make up for love affection. Congratulations on your deserved win. Hugs // paul
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Date: 3/18/2018 3:47:00 AM
Sad and heartbreaking. Congratulations on your win and thank you for penning your emotions. Kai
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Date: 3/18/2018 2:54:00 AM
Heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved win, Eve - blessings and best wishes to you, friend! :-)
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Date: 3/18/2018 12:16:00 AM
Is a great one! Congrats, my friend!
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Date: 3/18/2018 12:05:00 AM
Congrats on your win!
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Date: 3/17/2018 8:57:00 PM
Very moving and excellently written, Eve! CONGRATS! Janice Soupmail.
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Date: 3/17/2018 1:29:00 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Eve :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/17/2018 9:11:00 AM
A poignant poem with a balance of raw emotion and touching imagery. Congrats on a winning poem, Eve.
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Date: 1/27/2018 5:00:00 AM
An emotional write Eve, children robbed of a happy childhood is such a sad thing. Good luck on this wonderful sonnet....Maria
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Date: 1/24/2018 9:56:00 PM
Wow. Such a sad write. Emotional.
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Date: 1/24/2018 5:27:00 PM
So sad when home should be a happy place of comfort Eve. I too trembled to hear Dad's wrath.
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Date: 1/24/2018 9:30:00 AM
A new form of sonnet, looks like an interesting form, you did very well and created a sad poem...
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Date: 1/24/2018 7:46:00 AM
Beautiful reflection on the theme ... ending with the lovely couplet, Eve ... a sure win ...
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Date: 1/24/2018 6:32:00 AM
You brought me to tears Eve! Every line so honestly touching and heartbreaking. Such experiences do affect a lifetime. This is a winning poem.
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Date: 1/24/2018 1:56:00 AM
An agonizing Sonnet expressing traumatizing truths in superb poetic way! Good luck dear, Eve!
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Date: 1/24/2018 1:46:00 AM
- It was different then, Eve - Mother was usually home and dad had to work hard for food and clothes - Only the last seven years after my mother died, I've learned to know my father - A great poem with a theme that many people know and feel - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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