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Today is my ONE YEAR here at Poetry Soup :) I couldn't be more grateful to be able to express myself in ways I never imagined. Thank you to everyone who supports me and appreciates me along with how I feel and write. God Bless you all!  :):):)

Love, Laura Loo

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After the snowfall but before the lily blossoms, you were this woman who left by choice. All natural decisions made from a place of despair. Darkness consumed you as you fell into an addiction with expressions of deep sorrow and remorse... step by step by step... taking steps... foot by foot by foot... Slower than a run, yet faster than a turtle, closer and closer towards your oblivion... Into mysterious unconsciousness, I whispered... "Goodbye, my love"...as you walked away. After the spring but before the leaves, I found you drained of energy. Completely exhausted into nothingness,and through it all, you still loved me. Seems like yesterday we walked side by side- you..me...the gentle breeze... You need not ask for forgiveness, sweetheart, it has been granted long ago, and before you were gone I already whispered... “Goodbye, my love"...as you walked away. After the sun but before the rain, you tore out the pages from your favorite book. You wrote it at such a tender age. Too young to understand, yet too old to make believe. Big brown eyes, wearing a ball cap on your head. Smiling while hiding and running while crying. I couldn't handle this defeated hopelessness you wore on your sleeves with patches sewn on to cover up the burn holes... I sit at your grave once again. No tears, no laughter, no guilt, I stood up and whispered... “Goodbye, my love"...as I walked away... I wrote this during a difficult grieving time in my life. It had been almost 6 years since my sister Karen took her life. She was always saying goodbye, and it was finally time for me to say goodbye and let go of the guilt and sorrow. September 27, 2016

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Date: 7/15/2017 3:26:00 PM
Terribly sad, but I remember this winning once or twice before, congrats again, even with the very best poets competing with their best writes this still shines, a worthy placement, and I think also your best!
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Date: 7/15/2017 7:30:00 AM
A big hug... A beautiful expression of love and forgiveness, sweet Luloo! Congrats on your most deserved win!
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Date: 7/15/2017 7:07:00 AM
So pleased to find out this was yours, Laura Loo, as I just adored the exquisite phrasing and heart-wrenching story ... this touched my heart very deeply, and is just wonderful! Congrats on SIXTH PLACE, and thank you so much for entering my contest! :-)
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Date: 1/5/2017 8:14:00 PM
Congrats on your win with this beautiful poem, Laura. I don't know how I missed this when you first posted it - I am very glad that I got the chance to read it now :)
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Date: 12/30/2016 4:03:00 AM
Great win for a great poem, congrats lulu. :)
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Date: 12/29/2016 6:33:00 PM
Wow! Heart wrenching beautifully written love. And awesome work of poetic art.
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Date: 12/29/2016 4:19:00 PM
Awesome, heartfelt write!!
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Date: 12/29/2016 10:15:00 AM
Somehow I missed this one the first time around, my mistake. Well done LuLoo and congratulations...
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Date: 12/29/2016 12:20:00 AM
This one is heart wrenching, Laura:) well deserved trophy win:) congratulations:) have a blessed new year ahead:)
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Date: 12/28/2016 7:29:00 AM
So beautiful, Laura! Congratulations! 7
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Date: 12/27/2016 7:56:00 PM
So well done. Beautiful, Laura. Congratulations! ...Fran
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Date: 12/27/2016 7:39:00 PM
*tear* well done Laura!! Very beautiful and deeply touching. Congrats my friend!!! Big Hugggs. Deb :)
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Date: 12/27/2016 7:05:00 PM
Laura, congratulations on your First Place Trophy win for this amazing poem. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/27/2016 6:37:00 PM
Congratulations Laura on this sterling top tier win. Well written in form and content a true success.
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Date: 12/27/2016 5:48:00 PM
Congratulations on this moving poem taking top honors luloo! Have a beautiful new year! 7 ; )
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Date: 12/27/2016 5:43:00 PM
Congrats Laura, this was so heart touching and affectionate. The love and missing is so evident in this piece. I can see why it took top honors in this contest.
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Date: 12/27/2016 5:10:00 PM
Congrats Laura on your amazing win!
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:34:00 PM
Laura, back again to congratulate you again for another outstanding placement for this heartfelt poem. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/5/2016 7:56:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:23:00 AM
thank you lovely Jan :)-luloo
Date: 10/5/2016 7:23:00 AM
Congrats on the super win for this wonderful, poignant work!! Terry
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:23:00 AM
thank you Terry :)-luloo
Date: 10/4/2016 9:34:00 PM
Congrats on your win with this heartfelt write Laura
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:22:00 AM
thank you dear Joseph :)-luloo
Date: 10/4/2016 6:57:00 PM
Lovely, Luloo! congratulations!!
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:22:00 AM
thank you sweet Kim :)-luloo
Date: 10/4/2016 5:59:00 PM
WELL....if ya like it the first time....then you should love it the second time. Laura, I must have read this poem a dozen times and each read revealed another dimensional layer. Glad you chose to "Drop It In" the contest and thanks for participating.
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Date: 10/5/2016 8:21:00 AM
wow John, I am so honored you liked my poem enough to find it winning worthy. Yes there are many layers to this poem and it is my all time fave poem I have written about my sister. Thanks again :)-luloo
Date: 9/29/2016 7:08:00 PM
So very emotional and moving, Laura. Congratulations on our well-deserved First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/29/2016 8:52:00 PM
thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo
Date: 9/29/2016 8:31:00 AM
this is an amazingly poignant write Laura and well deserving of its placement. Thanks for sharing this one, it even made an old "tough guy" sniff a few times.
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Date: 9/29/2016 10:12:00 AM
thank you very much John :)-luloo
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