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Goodbye, My Child

Where cradled canyons sing
Of ebony wood in the forest
There lies a gurgling spring
Where cockcrows sing their chorus
To the melody of singsong birds
There I’ve concealed my sensuous words
Filled with befitted signs
The saccharine whiff of my designs

Come to me my mortal youth
To the wild realm of your truth
Where nymphs and gnomes abound
For the earth is filled with weeping
And only your tears be found

Where the fogs of night are fountains
Spills of glistened moon ignite
By distant silhouette mountains
We dance with passion of fight
Entwining ancient stance 
Mingling hand in hand we dance
Till the mountains smile on high
Near and far we spring
To pursue the realest of dreams
While the world cries at its seams
Anxious in trouble to cling

Come to me my mortal youth
To the wild realm of your truth
Where nymphs and gnomes abound
For the earth is filled with weeping
And only your tears be found

To where the ridges merry make 
From the beaks of wooden bright
In sparkly pools the ghouls awake
That scarce to stir our night
We watch for seekers down under
Muttering secrets in their soul
We bid them lucks of shivers
Dipping gently in
From reeds that hide a tear of a foal
Under the gentle rivers

Come to me my mortal youth
To the wild realm of your truth
Where nymphs and gnomes abound
For the earth is filled with weeping
And only your tears be found

Far away she shall ever churn
The taciturn eyed
She’ll listen no more to turn
To the working mills beside
Or the scrubbing of the barn
May peace weave in her song
She shall wave in the yarn
To a haven known as Belong  

Come to me my mortal youth
To the wild realm of your truth
Where nymphs and gnomes abound
For the earth is filled with weeping
And only your tears be found

For she comes, the mortal youth
To the wild realm of her truth
Where nymphs and gnomes abound
For the earth is filled with weeping
And only her tears be found

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/27/2013 9:40:00 PM
This is by far the best poem I have read so far on this site and the first I've been compelled to comment on. A perfect score of 7 does not do this poem justice. Your diction is superb and the line "come to me my mortal youth" haunts me every time I read it. Simply put - a beautiful piece worthy of publication
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Date: 2/27/2013 5:58:00 AM
This is an epic piece...its going to my favs
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Date: 2/26/2013 7:54:00 AM
great job
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Date: 2/22/2013 2:26:00 AM
Good work I enjoyed your writing very much, just my type of poem!! :) GypsyofEssence
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/22/2013 6:50:00 PM
Thank you sooo much. 8) ~Laura
Date: 2/15/2013 5:39:00 AM
Laura : just amazing !!! - Well done! .... Hope you had a romantic Valentine's day. - - Have a beautiful weekend! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/22/2013 6:50:00 PM
Aww, thanks Anne. You are so uplifting! ~Laura
Date: 2/14/2013 3:34:00 AM
amazing poertry, Laura, so soul searching, and sincere..i really do love this...
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/22/2013 6:49:00 PM
I am glad my poem touched you in that way. It is very fulfilling to write for others. Lots of love your way my friend. ~Laura
Date: 2/12/2013 12:32:00 PM
love it mate blown away your words well crafted thankyou for coments on mine hope you well xxx davidscott
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/22/2013 6:48:00 PM
Thanks David, you a marvelous poet. Can't wait to read some more of yours. ~Laura
Date: 2/11/2013 8:42:00 PM
Hello Laura, your poem took me into the enigma of your mind.. What might sound like a dramatic deep morbid beginning for the deep opening image, is actually strangely beautiful. you had me at grip with your mortal youth, and tears. Like Andrea, I am adding you as a favorite poet, IF NOT ALREADY. I will also read this poem again, and share it with my sister, Whom is here to visit me. Adding the poem to my favorite list *as well* I can't wait to bother your other poems.:-) teeheehee. xox~LINDA
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/11/2013 8:54:00 PM
Your comment was ever uplifting. Thanks so much for the support, Linda. Beautiful avatar by the way. :)
Date: 2/11/2013 5:40:00 PM
wow, this is fantastical, Laura. Luv how you kept repeating key lines and how this makes me feel my desire for imagination and youth. I was about to leave Soup for the night and saw your recent comment to me. Glad you read that one about my year 2000, when things started to change for me. That was a fantastic year and I wish I could almost freeze time there, except then I would not have written so many more poems!! Luv, Andrea. ps. am faving you for a poet. CAn't believe I have not done it yet.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/11/2013 5:43:00 PM
Andrea, you are most kind. . .I appreciate your visits and your comments. You have gotten so far, have written so many wonders--I can't wait to read more from you! ~Laura