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ORIGINAL POEM Late dusk arrives again as a corner in my mind’s eyes opens and trickles of phrases holding me captive beside the window : the heart is still yet my body quivers with some kind of need to etch the whispers brushing against a tapping pane. And I reach for lyrics like a musical recital of quiet alone- time, when twilight's lullaby sways in abated cadence, turning blank papers into a raw soliloquy as fevered wrist begins to pulse from the hinges. --- NEW POEM As fevered wrist begins to pulse from the hinges, misty vignettes glide, while swoosh of rain 's ink bathes upon the sill's ivy lattice. I reach for its nectar: this breath sipping the language of words yearning to be born... from my window, a gush filters through hooks and shingles as lines bounce around to to tumble into drafts of musings. In this special place, I allow this grace of charm to open my soul’s voice like an outpour of dew... a promise to cruise unto unknown trails, enticed . Somehow, late dusk arrives bringing a thrill along my hands, ready to greet the beginnings of a shower's melody... half-healed, half-wise.
Laura Loo's Famous Last Line Contest 3/5/2016

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Date: 3/20/2016 11:43:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome "Famous last line win." ~LINDA~
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Date: 3/19/2016 5:42:00 PM
This is wonderful Nette! Both poems speak to the poet in me in soft whispers that echo through my thoughts and coax my muse to return. Beautiful! Congratulations on your second place win. I am honored to be in your company. ; )
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:41:00 PM
Great poetry, nette. Should have been given a 1. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/17/2016 9:06:00 PM
Hi Nette, congratulations on your win in the contest....Vlad.
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Date: 3/17/2016 5:46:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Nette :)
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:53:00 AM
Nette, Your words flowed so easily and lovely imagery through out both of them. Thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your placement :)-luloo *smiles*
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Date: 3/7/2016 2:11:00 PM
Dear Nette Awesome work here Nette loved both of them, just beautiful again so packed full of wonderful imagery, cheri
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Date: 3/7/2016 1:04:00 AM
Pretty much every line here packs a punch surely a poem with some twists and one that makes us think, beautiful! I loved both of them!
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:58:00 PM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:21:00 AM
Is this is where inspiration comes from? This is a very, very rare insight into your thinking process. Something as a topic not written about much, but it is a pleasure to read. It's not often I can get into someone's mind like this.
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Date: 3/6/2016 1:06:00 AM
Awed by the flow of continuity from the 1st to 2nd poem. Masterful craftsmanship! Thank you for your compliment.
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Date: 3/5/2016 4:41:00 PM
Both poems are very beautifully penned with a lovely flow Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/5/2016 3:51:00 PM
Nette, both poems are amazing, so wonderfully penned, I was lost in the beauty of your pen, and I am loving these poems 7 ~
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Date: 3/5/2016 4:32:00 AM
The stirring of the quill to bloom into words! Your hands craft the best of poetry--- 'rain's ink!"
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