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Fairy Diary: Day 11-- a Picnic

Fairy Diary: Day 11-- A Picnic When Lolly, Gag, and Lint Went to a pic-a-nic They hid behind a tree And ate the peppermint! The capers made Gag sick... Or maybe 'twas the brie! Everything was grand! At least I thought so. Lint got in the jam And would not let go (We lent Lint a hand). Rain soon started. Biscuits got wet... Broken hearted? Oh no! Not yet! 'Till Lolly Ate them all up--soggy! Gag and Lint, then Went! ©deborah burch 6/15/2012

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/26/2012 2:18:00 AM

Your ending was hilarious. Loved this and see why it made the winners list. Congrats!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/24/2012 9:36:00 PM

love the way this ended, deborah.. sweet congrats!..:) huggs!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/24/2012 9:36:00 AM

I'm giggling! You do seem to have that affect on me! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/23/2012 8:18:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in David's "Hexaverse" contest Deborah. Love, Carol

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 6/22/2012 6:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning spot Debs, you are so funny xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/22/2012 3:46:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Gwendolen Song

Date: 6/22/2012 2:00:00 PM

Yowza---you mystical writer, YOU!...How quaint and imaginative, Debs....You wrote so well for this contest of David's...Congrats girl! gwendolen

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/22/2012 11:17:00 AM

Hi, Deb~xox~ a wonderful congratulations, in David's True version of Diminishing Hexaverse. Have yourself a good day (: PD

David Williams

Date: 6/22/2012 10:55:00 AM

Cap'n Deb, what can I say?.. just excellent..thanks for entering and well done..David

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/22/2012 10:00:00 AM

This is so cute and whimsical. Congrats on your win, Deborah! Love, Kim

Jonas L. Rozario

Date: 6/22/2012 9:19:00 AM

Nice humor & rhyming Deborah...well deserved win for you!!! Many congrats!!!

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/22/2012 9:24:00 AM

:-) thank you deat Jonas...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2012 7:52:00 AM

oh yes, I sure remember THIS playful one. One of my favorites in the contest. Congrats on your big win.

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/22/2012 9:25:00 AM

thank you again my dear friend!! :-)

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 6/22/2012 7:48:00 AM

Congrats on your winning poem Deborah!!!!

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/22/2012 9:26:00 AM

thanks G :-)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/21/2012 4:36:00 PM

Cute..Got a chuckle..Enjoyed reading this eve..Sara

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/22/2012 9:29:00 AM

thank you Sara!! hope you are well...love ya...:-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2012 7:37:00 PM

hahaha. What cute playing on words and clever idea for this to be a fairy diary. A unique entry in the contest!

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/19/2012 8:27:00 PM

lol thank you so much Andrea...:)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/16/2012 5:53:00 PM

Deb, enjoyed..xox~pd

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/19/2012 8:27:00 PM

thanks sweet pd!! :)

Russell Sivey

Date: 6/16/2012 12:31:00 PM

Ha Ha, I just love the humor of your write! This is a perfectly rhymed poem Deborah! I really enjoyed the elaborately expressed write you have written! This is a spectacular poem my friend! Great work!!

Deborah Burch
Date: 6/16/2012 1:06:00 PM

:-) lol thank you dear Russell...you are sooo kind to me...thanks for cheering my day....love ya, deb