Every Time I Have You Close- Triolet Sonnet

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Every time I have you close my dear This remarkable yearning of you brings me home The sound of your voice reaches the clouds so far Every time I have you close my dear My lips are stilled to me you're like a star In my heart I evoke your name and just roam Every time I have you close my dear... This remarkable yearning of you brings me home And I am so happy to have your love so far Every time I have you close my dear I know that losing you would leave me a scar And rhymes like before no more would flow Every time I have you close my dear This remarkable yearning of you brings me home. Dorian Petersen Potter aka ladydp2000 copyright@2014 October.2.2014 My triolet sonnet here is free style ...that means, I didn't write it with 8 or 10 syllables or any steady number of syllable pattern at all. That's simple!

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/21/2014 10:37:00 PM

Not seeing the pattern? the end of line 1 should rhyme with lines 3,4,5,7,9,10,11,& 13? They are all a's? 1,4,7,10,& 13 (the repeat but still rhyming with the word - close? - even if the whole line is not repeated - but you only repeated the whole line in 1, 7 &10? - I like forms I just couldn't figure out how to do it? Let me know.I see (A/b/c/a?/d/d/A/d) Light & Love

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/2/2014 7:14:00 PM

I am all in just like Jan, fav and a 7.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/2/2014 2:16:00 PM

Dorian this is a stunning romantic write with great imagery I love the repeating lines in this clever form. its faves and a 7 from me! Hugs jan xxx

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/2/2014 6:26:00 PM

Thank you so much Jan for the high rating for commenting and all. Much appreciated my sweet friend. Hugs to you too! Love and light! xxx D.