Eve and a Place Called Eden

Oh, my soul is bare,

like a thorn stinging within my chest.

Beauty surrounds me, yet

I cannot draw pleasure from within.

This Eden that surround me, with

It's magnificent beauty evades me.

I cover, in embarrassment, 

For Adam did lie beside me.

Holding me captive in his arms

And I willingly complied.

Oh, my sweet Lord,

For our sweet innocence we grieve.

Now from this garden we must leave.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 11/13/2010 2:39:00 AM
"holding me captive in his arms and i willingly complied....." therefore sin evade the world, and affected Africa the most, by poverty and corrupt leaders. dear mother, this poem is deeper than the way people think it is. well written. love, son.
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Date: 6/21/2010 10:28:00 AM
And shame was born. Very powerful writing, Phyllis. Thank you for sharng your poetic talent. Love, Lainie,
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Date: 6/21/2010 8:03:00 AM
I like the essence of this piece a lot. The storyline is excellent. Great job! Joseph
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your success in the contest, Phyllis, and thanks for your kind words on "Lonely No More." Hope you had a great weekend! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/18/2010 1:30:00 PM
love the poem but not the interpetation. john h loving iii
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Date: 6/14/2010 7:44:00 AM
Sad day in Eden...I know the angels wept also..Sara
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Date: 6/8/2010 6:46:00 PM
This poem feels like such an honest reflection of some of what Eve felt after her sin. Well done! Congratulations on your contest win. Enjoy your honor. Wishing you ongoing success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 6/1/2010 9:05:00 AM
This is absolutely wonderful. I just got home from holidays and to see that I actually won a contest(my first). I am in my glory. Thank you. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 5/31/2010 9:03:00 PM
Congrats on your HM Phyllis for a wonderful write .. and a great honor to enjoy ...luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 5/30/2010 3:05:00 PM
Thank you for being apart of our contest! Soup mail! Light & Love
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Date: 5/27/2010 1:50:00 PM
This seems like such a realistic portrayal of what Eve must have felt like after disobeyed God. I like how the emotion comes through our words. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your comment. Keep on writing!! Karen
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Date: 5/27/2010 8:38:00 AM
Withe all the best in the contest
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Date: 5/27/2010 8:08:00 AM
For their lost innocence...yes...we should all grieve!! Well done...this should do well, Phyllis!! Good luck! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/26/2010 10:37:00 PM
Quite deep and meaningful, Phyllis. Enjoyed the way you wrapped it up in the last two lines. Best wishes for the contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/26/2010 10:22:00 PM
This one is quite spiritual. I really like it, Phyllis. LUv, Andrea
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