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Eight Lines of Fate -Fate Doesn'T Exist

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Fictional write for the contest theme.

My mind is tormented each second and minute and hour of the day By shattered dreams that never came, my life is plagued by sadness I often think of what could or should have been on most days The cards that I have been dealt in this so called life were so terrible If this is fate then I don't believe in it and It doesn't exist at all I long for my days to be numbered really really fast In the midst of my soul is a profound darkness and emptiness Sometimes there's a vague notion of will I get a better hand? Submitted To The Eight Lines Of Contest Sponsor: Silent One 6- 26- 18

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Eve Roper

Date: 7/21/2018 11:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Your words convey such a deep pain and hopelessness that is gripping. Well done! Hugs Eve

Line Gauthier

Date: 7/21/2018 10:58:00 PM

Well done, Alexis. Congrats on your podium finish.

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/21/2018 4:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A sad and depressing poem about fate. Reminded me of 'accepting the hand you're dealt' which we all do so that we can build from there. Thought-provoking.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 7/20/2018 11:13:00 AM

A remarkable outpouring of the soul in this melancholy write, Alexis. You express your emotions well. Love and joy always.

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 7/19/2018 2:43:00 PM

Whether friction or real, in any case this is a really sad and beautiful poem, if this is real then I really hope that you get the happiness you are looking for, many congratulations om your win in the contest, good luck and have a really nice day

Silent One

Date: 7/19/2018 7:38:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/20/2018 4:43:00 PM

Hi Silent, You hosted a good contest. I appreciate my placement in your contest:-)Alexis

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/19/2018 7:38:00 AM

- Many of the poems are so beautiful that they hit me in the heart ... I'm so glad I'm not going to judge ... I'm just gonna congratulate you on your beautiful win, Alexis :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/29/2018 8:21:00 PM

gosh, if this is true for you, I am sorry, Alexis. It does seem that some people have more tribulations than others. My husband is one of them, and so I live those tribulations through him and a few of my own. I really like this.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/29/2018 9:29:00 AM

Very well crafted Alexis...you just described a bit of my life lol...and probably countless others...love & light...^WW^

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/27/2018 9:44:00 AM

A most provocative write questioning whether one's life is preordained or whether one has any control on how things play out! Certainly you have penned a deep philosophical piece here, my friend! Well done, Alexis. This should do well in SO's contest! Hugs and best wishes. Pandita

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/27/2018 9:17:00 AM

I hope you are dealt 4 aces. Mind you I have witnessed people win with poor hands and they come out on top. Thanks for your visit.

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 6/26/2018 7:36:00 PM

Such a sad heartfelt write Alexis; Good luck in the contest!~Che :) PS Glad it is fictional! :)

Joseph May

Date: 6/26/2018 4:01:00 PM

A sad write Alexis..Hope things change for the better

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/26/2018 3:37:00 PM

Oh Sweetie! I'm sure you will. This poem got to me. How many times I've been there myself. Powerful write. Sending you love and light.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/26/2018 3:06:00 PM

i hope you will find the serendipity you are looking for, alexis... glad this is fiction; wonderful!...huggs

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/26/2018 11:53:00 AM

A lovely emotional write Alexis and glad to see its a fictional write. Good luck. Tom.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/26/2018 8:39:00 AM

Wonderful Alexis

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/26/2018 7:31:00 AM

God will never create an empty soul with no purpose and not a goal dearest Alexis! Very convincing writing! I know you do not mean it! Now the question about the better hand is concerned! Well, you have to learn the game first! haha! Excellent writing for the purpose it was written dear, Alexis!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/26/2018 6:36:00 AM

I'm glad it is a fictional write. You had me wandering in sad places. You depicted a state of mind when nothing feels worthwhile facing darkness and emptiness as you say..Fate will do that sometimes! Great piece for the contest..best of luck for a win, Alexis.

Lyric Man

Date: 6/26/2018 6:12:00 AM

Sad write, Alexis! People need to realize you can get dealt a rough hand but you don't have to keep it. You can ask the dealer for new cards. You can work hard and go buy a new deck. There is always a way if there is always a will to want more and be more!