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She holds me in magnetic fascination,
a force beyond control, beyond delight...
I turn to her in helpless adoration.

Her steely grip is my emancipation, 
the liberating sense that all is right -
she holds me in magnetic fascination.

I thrill at my unwilling subjugation,
so deeply proud to be her acolyte,
I turn to her in helpless adoration.

She is my ground, she is my elevation,
and even as I climb to each new height, 
she holds me in magnetic fascination.

We dance around the sun in exaltation,
our orbits locked; I’m dizzied by our flight -
I turn with her, in helpless adoration. 

Her oxygen is my intoxication,
she brings my day, she’ll also bring my night,
and held by her magnetic fascination,
I will return to her... in adoration.

23 July 2019
For Contest Finetune This Collaboration sponsored by Line Gauthier

An adaptation of the original poem below.
I kept the words in bold (although “exalt” became “exaltation”) and, I hope, some of the spirit of the poem.

Magnetic fascination
Kin to emancipation
A connection internal
Stirs emotions supernal
Nature is unparalleled  
Provokes intoxication
As we feel deeply compelled
To exalt admiration

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Date: 8/6/2019 2:00:00 AM
Congratulations, Nina on your top win, and deserving.
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Date: 8/5/2019 4:09:00 PM
So beautiful! A delight to read! Congratulations, Nina!
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Date: 8/5/2019 9:24:00 AM
I'm happy to get back to conratulate you, Nina)
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Date: 8/5/2019 5:51:00 AM
BRAVO - perfection. Thanks for entering my contest, Nina. Love the form you chose. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 7/31/2019 2:57:00 PM
Great villanelle, Nina. To my point of view, villanelle is as difficult as rondeau. Maybe a bit simpler. But the way you used the required words fascinates me. A really gorgeous thing.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/31/2019 3:12:00 PM
Thank you very much Kurt for your kind words. I do find rondeau a little trickier - I know there’s a rondeau contest up at the moment and I’ve already had my first aborted attempt!
Date: 7/26/2019 10:27:00 AM
Wow Nina this is a well written Villanelle, not an easy form but you mastered it! Great collaboration poem! I just got back from vacation so haven’t had time to even work in this contest! I think you will do rather well with this masterpiece:) hugs
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/31/2019 3:13:00 PM
Aw thank you very much Sandra!
Date: 7/26/2019 1:36:00 AM
Great imagery is woven beautifully into the form. Smoooth which is perfect in a Villanella (to me.) Loved your wordy drizzle on my mini-universe poem page. Finding such usually frightens me but in your case, I was grateful for all you left - thanks, Nina. Place or no, your contests are enjoyable 'thinkers'! Again, beautiful write. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 7/23/2019 6:49:00 PM
Uniquely Nina is all I can say. Amazingly well done. Bravo. ~ Gershon
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Date: 7/23/2019 6:45:00 PM
Wow Nina, this is very impressive! I couldn't think of any way to even begin. You did a splendid job that is sure to be noticed! xxoo : )
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