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I know you’re not a pink flamingo you’re black and I should have two legs which I lack, my Mom was a pod and "Goodness, Ohhh Lordy there’s more of us growin’ in the back forty! "Don’t you mind being black in fact my Ma wanted a red head how bout that! Well I’m a bonnie lass with a bottom of petals without any legs to put petal to metal. But, we can be friends I know that’s true you can run for me and I can kiss for you. Find a sister for my brother his name’s Shorty He needs a girl with legs in the back forty!

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Date: 4/24/2011 3:05:00 PM
lovely pen
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Date: 4/11/2011 7:07:00 AM
Absolutely wonderful, love your poems, Debbie, Congrats on ti worthy winner. Harry
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Date: 4/8/2011 12:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win - great poem : ) Jack
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Date: 4/8/2011 12:35:00 AM
Hey, you got in with humor. Way to go, Debs. Awesome win!
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Date: 4/7/2011 9:59:00 PM
Many congrats Debbie for this win. Had a lot of fun reading it.
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Date: 4/7/2011 8:20:00 AM
Congrats Debbie on your first place win in Robb's Montage Meltdown contest.. a great write and win for u to enjoy with luv.. awesome as always ...
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Date: 4/7/2011 8:11:00 AM
Truly Terrific!! You are number uno !!!!! :)
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Date: 4/7/2011 8:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your 1st place win in Robb's contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/7/2011 8:01:00 AM
very well done Deb ..... I liked i t all along...... it's excellent .... "Petal to metal" still does it for me....congratulations ...Syd
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Date: 4/7/2011 7:13:00 AM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Robb, Debbie
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Date: 3/20/2011 2:09:00 AM
(last box) but the poem is breathtaking in its range.....perhaps it would have been easier in some other form, because sestina is awkward for "serious/true" stories...I myself would only use sestina for fiction or entertainment...but you do succeed in showing his madness by the switching from topic to topic and weaving them crazily together......please don't take any offence at my remarks in these boxes...I'm no expert at anything...sincere regards....Syd
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Date: 3/20/2011 1:50:00 AM
( next box)..check spellings on ....lightening(lightning) passes (pass) falls (fall),..... and check punctuation throughout, because it sometimes confuses the meaning...and quotation marks e.g., "How? Why?" interrupt the flow with no gain to the message of the poem ( bet ter without " " marks).....(see next comment box)
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Date: 3/20/2011 1:40:00 AM
Ok Deb there's a couple of things which might be useful to you (a) I have experimented with it , and it certainly does fit onto a single page when you post the two poems as one ...try it and you will agree (b) the poem is epic in its range and depth, but the lines seem too long, with words like "concussion" too often repeated. (c) some words and phrases could be better spelled etc ( see next comment box)
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Date: 3/20/2011 1:09:00 AM
ooooops.... Ok I have just found it .... ...Madness moonlihght etc....I am working on it right now....gimme a half hour
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Date: 3/20/2011 1:05:00 AM
love this especially "petal to metal" very funny...........Deb I will be pleased to comment on the "PART I MADNESS MOONLIGHT etc".....but where is it? I dont see it in your list of poems at all ....... tell me and i will do it immediately.....best wishes
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Date: 3/19/2011 5:39:00 PM
Cool ..Clever .. Creative Debbie.. enjoyed a chuckle too.. great rhyme sequence.. happy weekend luv..
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Date: 3/19/2011 5:12:00 PM
Gave me a laugh..still laughing. BG
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Date: 3/19/2011 4:41:00 PM
Interesting thoughts penned..Sara
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