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Mummy says its time for me to say my prayers I know she listens on the landing by the stairs I kneel down by the side of my cosy bed Soon it will be time to rest my weary head Every night I close my eyes and pray To say thank you God for a lovely day God bless mummy; I say that every night God bless daddy; now a star that shines so bright Please God can you stop mummy from crying She’s so so sad with my daddy dying Look after grandma Bo and grandpa Boo Daddy was their son he loved them too God please can you tell mummy I don’t like cheese It tickles my throat and then makes me wheeze Can you help me with the answers to my maths test I will practice my times tables, I will try and do my best Mummy says I can have a little kitten for being so good But I’d swap the kitten to have daddy back if I could PLEASE God can you stop mummy from crying She’s so so sad with my daddy dying AMEN 05~17~15 Contest:- Prayertime Memories – Isaiah Zerbst ~awarded 1st place~

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 6/28/2015 8:22:00 AM

Congratulations to your AWESOME win Jan! ^_^

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:39:00 PM

Thanks Teddy it is always an honour to place in Isaiah's contest I admire him very much as a sponsor:-) hugs Jan xx

Len Gasun

Date: 6/28/2015 7:46:00 AM

A very beautiful child's prayer this is my very dear friend, Jan! Congratulations for your well-deserved super win! Thank you so much for sharing! Thank you so much as well for your congratulatory and inspiring comments on mine. I'm sorry, if i came only now 'cuz got a flu this week caused by hot weather here. Again, thank you so much! God bless! love lots and big hugs, Leonora

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:38:00 PM

I hope you are feeling better Leonora:-) Thanks for dropping by am having a tough time at the moment and will not be writing for a while:-( hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 6/22/2015 8:53:00 PM

Well done Jan, what a sincere little prayer from a child.....Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:37:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Seren I am having a tough time at the moment and will not be writing for a while:-( hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/22/2015 11:42:00 AM

Check out my latest, I think you might enjoy it.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/22/2015 11:43:00 AM

will do have only got on line for the first time today:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/22/2015 8:15:00 AM

I can see why this one is in top spot, very moving!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/22/2015 11:38:00 AM

Thanks so much Richard I was delighted that Isaiah liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Lanette Kissel

Date: 6/21/2015 1:57:00 PM

Jan, Congrats on your win. Such a sweet and lovely poem. Very touching. Lanette Kissel

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 1:59:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Lanette:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/21/2015 12:40:00 PM

This poem is so sweet. Wonderful to see it recieve a top placement Jan. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 12:53:00 PM

Thanks Connie I am so please Isaiah liked it so much - I can imagine it is the type of thing a child would say:-) Hugs Jan xx

Abdul Malik

Date: 6/21/2015 10:44:00 AM

Hey, you are top of the heap! It appears you are closer to God!! Congrats. Very nice.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 12:35:00 PM

LOL Abdul I am sure the top placement is more down to luck than judgment lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/21/2015 10:22:00 AM

Congratulations Jan!!! No1 spot! Amen! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 10:30:00 AM

Not bad for someone who writes poop poetry or is that poetry about poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 6/21/2015 1:42:00 AM

Congratulations Jan...SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 10:30:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) Hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/21/2015 1:04:00 AM

nice win. PD

Jan Allison
Date: 6/21/2015 10:29:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) Hugs jan xx

Kari Mitchell

Date: 6/20/2015 8:06:00 PM

Well deserved top pick! I love the way you snuck in the childlike attention with the cheese concern!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 11:20:00 PM

I tried to write as though a child was actually saying the prayer am so glad you liked it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Huberta Van Akkeren

Date: 6/20/2015 6:07:00 PM

congrats Jan...a well earned first...a lovely but sad prayer cheers H

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 6:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Huberta:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 6/20/2015 6:06:00 PM

Congratulations Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 6:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Judy hope you have a wonderful day:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 6/20/2015 12:33:00 PM

A heartfelt write Jan... Congrats on your win

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 12:42:00 PM

Thanks Joseph I am delighted Isaiah liked my poem so much:-) hugs jan xx

The Grahamburglar

Date: 6/20/2015 12:07:00 PM

Well deserved win, Jan! This was great, and you're right, we did choose the same theme for this one. Great minds... ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 12:09:00 PM

Thanks Preston - the image is so wonderful and I am always inspired by Isaiah's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/19/2015 8:39:00 PM

Congratulations on this beautiful winning piece. So hard not to have tears . Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:40:00 AM

Thanks Eve I am grinning like a cheshire cat here:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 6/19/2015 8:00:00 PM

Congratulation Jan on your top tier first place, well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:39:00 AM

OH WOW Robert thanks for being the bearer of amazing news - Isaiah's contests inspire me so much I am absolutely delighted he liked my poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 5/29/2015 5:21:00 PM

The poem is incredibly moving, and the image is simply wonderful Jan, nice one girl, James xxxxx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 5:27:00 PM

The image was the one Isaiah posted to inspire us - I think it is so charming:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 5/20/2015 5:50:00 PM

A touching prayer. You've captured the innocent words of a young child. A 7. Blessings for the contest, Jan. hugs! Kim

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2015 5:50:00 PM

Thanks Kim I find it emotional re reading this now:-( Hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 5/20/2015 5:05:00 PM

Wow Jan Ever so sweet until the powerful ending. Both sad and beautiful. Good luck

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2015 5:10:00 PM

Thanks Christopher - I feel emotional reading this now I am getting comments a few days after it was posted:-) Hugs Jan xx

Highwave Brian

Date: 5/20/2015 2:56:00 PM

Really loved your work here. So sad, yet innocent. Thankyou.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2015 3:19:00 PM

Thanks so much Brian:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 5/20/2015 2:43:00 PM

Excellent, sweet and sad. Children's prayers are serious and cute in content. It's the age of innocence. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2015 3:18:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Paul I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/19/2015 9:48:00 AM

She is a beautiful daughter of beautiful parents having taught with beautiful Sanskar. Sanskar means very good sense of love and respect. 7++. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2015 10:53:00 AM

Thanks so much BL:-) Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/19/2015 4:35:00 AM

Beautifully and lovingly written jan... :0 ~olive eloisa

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2015 10:52:00 AM

Thanks so much Olive always a pleasure to see your beautiful face:-) Hugs Jan xx