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Damn You, Eve

Mourn my loss of innocence; the Queen of Love, and I her prince. Dance, we dance, all the way to Heaven- born of grief, and the things I have written...And dare I ask, or merely inquire, on who doth Love me, and who is a liar? Just say my name, old curse of shame, cloaked in dark, and murky colors No skies to fly, no seas to sail, no land on which to keep my Lovers All too silent, this lonely night; No choice to choose, no grounds to fight These pleading words, and Fools in herds- marching to the Ends of the Earth People I loath, and you were told: I do wish Eve hadn't given birth...

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/17/2013 3:56:00 PM

Honey are you home ;) [Lucy said to Dezi]

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 12/17/2013 4:05:00 PM

Don't get me started, Debbie; I love me some Lucy! ;)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/12/2013 8:57:00 AM

An interesting verse & concepts. Light & Love

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 12/17/2013 11:42:00 AM

Many thanks, Debbie :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/12/2013 7:41:00 AM

I enjoyed rereading this one after reading the winning poem in your contest.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/12/2013 8:19:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed, my friend :)

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 10/31/2013 1:56:00 AM

If Adam could talk....interesting piece. It flows so well but the blame ..oh the blame.... yet I detect a hint of his own regret, deep in the lines. Is this where our nostalgia for gardens began? SuZ

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/31/2013 8:37:00 AM

Thanks for the read and review SuZ! It may very well have ;)

Cole Banner

Date: 10/30/2013 7:32:00 AM

Nice flow...

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/30/2013 8:06:00 AM

Thanks for visiting and review, Cole :)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 10/25/2013 9:07:00 PM

Again...smooth dude! With cool undertones!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/26/2013 6:27:00 AM

I appreciate the read and reply, Jimbo! :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/25/2013 5:00:00 PM

This poem has so much depth in it..Its as if blaming Eve for our existence.To be born out of grief and face the loniliness of nights..yet nights won t all be lonely..nor days too cold..and grief will birth its joy..that is every human breathing on this milky way..Excellent rhyme

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/26/2013 6:26:00 AM

Thanks so much for stopping by and for the read and review, Charmain; I truly appreciate it :)

Joseph Matose

Date: 10/25/2013 6:17:00 AM

Archaic, you churned another GOOD one. Though not your famed style, it sounds great. Thanks. Friend, JM

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/25/2013 7:04:00 AM

This is an older piece and decided to leave it the way I originally wrote it; it adds a little variety I think. Thanks, JM! :)

Robin Davis

Date: 10/24/2013 1:28:00 PM

Chan This is a very intense write. You give the reader something to think. The way it is written keeps us interested all the way through. Great job my friend Hugs Thanks for the comment on my Scared of Life poem. Glad you liked it

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/24/2013 1:41:00 PM

I adore your work, hon; you know you can count me a fan, always. Thanks for the review <3

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/24/2013 9:45:00 AM

Fantastic thought provoking and emotional piece.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/24/2013 10:33:00 AM

Thanks for making me smile, Richard :)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 10/24/2013 6:03:00 AM

Thought provoking piece. You have given me a different perspective. Loved it.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/24/2013 9:22:00 AM

Many thanks, my friend :)

John Posey

Date: 10/23/2013 5:15:00 PM

Thought provoking and the source of many quarrels through the years... Adam told God Almighty, "It was this woman you gave me..... She made me do it" (paraphrased)....I look at that as the first 'copout' --- There's blame enough to go around..... Nice write, sweetheart.... Jake

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/24/2013 9:21:00 AM

Thanks for the review, John! ;)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 10/22/2013 12:20:00 AM

Woah mindblowing poem esp d endin! But i sure enjoyd dis kind of in angst poem so splendid n uniquely penned!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/23/2013 6:58:00 AM

Thank you S.! :)

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday

Date: 10/19/2013 6:49:00 PM

Hey, Archaic, it reminds me so sweet souvenirs! My son,, when he was a little boy, used to weep and say really angrily "I hate Adam and Eve!" whenever he had to come to me because he disobeyed and wanted to apologize! And he was so sad and so unhappy to do wrong! (He had learned from sunday school that we inherited sin from the originating couple! Couldn't they keep quiet!!!!) Fortunately, he grew up learning the whole story...

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/23/2013 6:59:00 AM

lol thanks for the amusing anecdote, V, and thanks for the review :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 10/19/2013 11:35:00 AM

Exceptional and so thought provoking. But what if she had not ?

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/19/2013 11:41:00 AM

Then none of us would be here right now lol SoupMailed you ;) <3

Debbie Duncan

Date: 10/18/2013 12:15:00 AM

Oh, I love this, such intrigue to the very end ;}

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/18/2013 10:16:00 AM

Many thanks, Debbie; I appreciate the read and review :)