Clouds

Clouds Clouds floating silent on dark angry skies, drenching the visions awaiting your eyes. Sinister shapes shadow happiness true, hiding the sight of the heavens so blue. Thunder and lightning now soon set to start, sending the rains that will fall on your heart 12/26/16 Written for the Concrete Crush Poetry Contest Sponsored by: FJ Thomas

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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 12/29/2016 11:45:00 AM

Nice one. Ah, clouds such a good idea for this contest. Your words are wonderful...Loved it.

Chris Green
Date: 12/29/2016 11:51:00 AM

Thanks so much my friend. This is a first for me, I have never tried one of these before. I have seen a few of the other entries and they are fantastic, so I'm not holding my breath but it was fun to do and I am glad you liked it.

Donna Roberts

Date: 12/28/2016 11:25:00 AM

Very creative on both fronts. Glad I am not the judge( hard job) good luck!

Chris Green
Date: 12/28/2016 11:42:00 AM

Thank you so very much Donna for your kind words.

Darren White

Date: 12/27/2016 12:58:00 AM

Hah! Wonderful concrete, that form :D Good luck in the contest!

Chris Green
Date: 12/27/2016 7:57:00 AM

Thanks so much my friend.

Eve Roper

Date: 12/26/2016 5:44:00 PM

Wow!!!! this is great, good luck in the contest Hugs eve

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 5:46:00 PM

Thanks so very much Eve for always saying such nice things about my poetry. I appreciate your visits my friend.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/26/2016 3:28:00 PM

You have done really well with this shape poem, Chris, considering the restraints which it brings along with it. I love the content of your cloud! Incidentally we both mention dark clouds in our respective poems!! Regards // paul

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 3:33:00 PM

Must just be one of those days Paul. :) Thank so very much my friend.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/26/2016 2:10:00 PM

Hi Chris, I see you are on a roll with great poems for the various contests. This is no exception. I loved the cloud shape. It looks like a winner to me. Well done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven: -) Alexis

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 2:19:00 PM

Thanks so much my sweet friend. I looked through the contests for some inspiration and found a few I wanted to try. This one though was a first for me, I have never written one of these before. I an excited you liked it Alexis.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 12/26/2016 1:16:00 PM

I love the cloud shape with faling raindrops ,and the message of your poem, Always , always after those dark skies, Hope follows.

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 1:36:00 PM

Thanks so very much my sweet friend. I always appreciate your visits.

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/26/2016 12:30:00 PM

Wow, Chris, even before one reads the text, even before seeing the title, the shape talks to us - there is some threat there. "Dark... sinister... thunder and lightning... the rains that will fall on your heart" - instantly classic, with that stinging shape.

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 12:50:00 PM

Thanks Doug for such encouraging comments on my little dark poem. I am thrilled you liked this one, I wasn't too sure about it at all.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 12/26/2016 12:27:00 PM

I don't understand the form, but I love the writing.

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 12:30:00 PM

Thanks so very much Sunlite. I didn't completely understand it either, I had to look it up. :)

Jan Allison

Date: 12/26/2016 12:00:00 PM

Brilliant concrete poem Chris such a descriptive poem good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 12:08:00 PM

Thanks Jan, so much. It's a first for me so I'm not sure how well it will do, but I figured I'd give it a try. I appreciate your visits always my friend.

Deborah Burch

Date: 12/26/2016 11:50:00 AM

FABULOUSSSS!! Chris!! Well done!! Best wishes for the contest!! Big Hugggs. Deb

Chris Green
Date: 12/26/2016 12:08:00 PM

Thanks so very much Deb for your nice comment.