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Circle of Sun - Fantasy Contest

Rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun as though they were in school watching a hula hoop being swung by one round and round the hoop swung mesmerizing in its swirl being watched by the cool  rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun I watched as they sat entranced in the sun Playing silly games but always aware and nobody's fool watching a hula hoop being swirled by one Mother’s of the rabbits arrived at a run food in a hamper with cold drinks for the supercool rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun Chase was next on the cards “touch your on”  was the favourite, except for the ones playing boule, watching a hula hoop being swirled by one. Next time your near a fairly glen tip toe in quietly and you might see these cool rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun watching a hula hoop being swirled by one Penned 30 June 2013

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Date: 7/9/2013 9:56:00 AM
Congratulations Seren on your win with this wonderful write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
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Seren Roberts
Date: 7/9/2013 10:22:00 AM
Hello Caryl, many thanks...Seren
Date: 7/9/2013 8:56:00 AM
Seren I love this little fairytale you've conveyed in your Villanelle. Congrats on your fabulous win warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/9/2013 9:11:00 AM
Thanks Connie was fun to think out
Date: 7/8/2013 8:01:00 PM
Quite the fantasy. congratulations. Love, joyce
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Seren Roberts
Date: 7/9/2013 9:11:00 AM
Thanks Joyce ...Seren
Date: 7/8/2013 3:39:00 PM
an awesome fantasy poem... congrats :-) love LINDA
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Seren Roberts
Date: 7/8/2013 6:58:00 PM
Thank you Linda ...Seren
Date: 7/8/2013 5:19:00 AM
Hi Seren a super lovely poem ty for entering congrats on your win Shadow x smiles
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Date: 7/8/2013 6:58:00 PM
Thank you Shadow ...Seren
Date: 7/2/2013 5:24:00 PM
Nice little story going on here. Nice work soupmail.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 7/8/2013 6:59:00 PM
Hi Wayland, thank you .....Seren
Date: 6/30/2013 8:20:00 PM
This is fantasy at its greatest my friend! You have painted a lovely image with this awesomely described Villanelle! I loved the image of the rabbits "watching a hula hoop being swirled by one" very creative part of this incredible poem! What a terrific piece, you have delighted me yet again Seren, Great Work!!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/30/2013 10:45:00 PM
Just a light relief poem Russell .....Seren
Date: 6/30/2013 9:36:00 AM
How cute is this!! .......I'm trying to picture that rabbit and the hula hoop...........delightful and whimsical !!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 6/30/2013 10:42:00 PM
Thanks Carrie just a fun piece ...Seren

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