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Chapter One Is My Nemesis

Chapter one is my nemesis,
now six times rewritten,
the diva, the broker,
the key to the smitten.
The readers are hers -
she can seize their attention
or turn them to air.
She demands perfection
yet shuns it, refuses it
defying my pen.
“Not enough,” she hisses.
“Write me again.”
And I, her hostage, 
obey, obey...
“Nice try,” she purrs,
“but not today.”

Long finished and skittish,
the rest must wait...
For great’s good enough
when you’re chapter eight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Date: 6/19/2019 8:47:00 PM
I know first-hand how exhausting the reading, re-writing & editing loop can be- and this is a PERFECT depiction of the process! Hang in there, and know that it will all be worth it in the end! ;)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/20/2019 1:05:00 AM
Thank you Rhona - I THINK I have cracked her now but then again, tomorrow I may re-read and despair again! Agh!!
Date: 6/10/2019 12:13:00 PM
I hope it will be mine too, someday, Nina...if I can ever manage to get past Line One! Love the somewhat "painful" humor here.
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Date: 6/8/2019 4:11:00 PM
Cleaver poetry, Nina, i sure you'll find a way, maybe one of your other completed chapters. Should you try as chapter one?
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/8/2019 5:48:00 PM
That would be great as the rest have come to much more easily! Unfortunately there are two intertwined stories and things need to be told/revealed in a certain order - so I’ve no choice but to stick with this chapter one and beat it until it complies lol! I’ll get there...
Date: 6/8/2019 3:56:00 AM
The art of novel writing, even for children, is that it is best to have a synopsis, divide into chapters and write those that appeal to you. I've written some books in Maltese, so you won't be able to read them, but would it surprise you if I said I never begin with chapter one? I have one short story on the soup, rather long but considered good (read on the BBC ages ago). So I know a thing or two about story telling.
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 6/9/2019 7:43:00 AM
Close the manuscript and let it rest for a few days. Then read the ending before revising the first. Repeat if necessary.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/8/2019 5:47:00 PM
Ah thank you Victor! I planned it all out and wrote it (mostly) to plan but always knew I’d have to come back and re-write chapter one at the end... now the time has come... and I’m stuck!
Date: 6/7/2019 12:36:00 PM
So that's where you've been - writing the Great American (or in this case, British) novel - I'm sure it will be a smashing success, as is this tasty little appetizer!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/7/2019 3:13:00 PM
Aw thanks Michelle - it’s a children’s book actually. It’s been ongoing for about nine months - nearly finished but chapter 1.... grr. Reason for my absence for the past few weeks is that I was on holiday and switched off - then the muse took a while to reboot afterwards :-)
Date: 6/7/2019 10:25:00 AM
I've not even started editing my poems for a poop book Nina, I am sure you will know when your book is ready and you are totally satisfied every word is purrfect:-) hugs jan xx
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/7/2019 3:10:00 PM
These tasks are daunting to crack into aren’t they! I don’t think I’ll ever think the book’s perfect, but I’m relatively pleased with most of it except flippin chapter 1 - every time I think I’ve got it, I go back a couple of days later and re-read it and am horrified by it! Gah! It’s killing me!
Date: 6/7/2019 9:59:00 AM
' "Nice try" she purrs'... very luxurious line; very good from start to finish, mind you, this poem really does purr. Nicely done.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 6/7/2019 3:07:00 PM
Thank you very much Lawrence - glad my little diva purred for you! ;-)