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Beyond the Sun- Help Me Name It Contest

Beyond the gaze of the sun lies paradise The lights on the horizon entice dreamy thoughts of many men their hopes and dreams when prayers sent the air is rent, with love so sincere afraid, yet wanting to hear, love blossoms, will wings of hope suffice. Beyond the gaze of the sun lies paradise My middle word is the Penned 10 February 2015 Form should be called centrifugal

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Arlene Smith

Date: 2/21/2015 4:38:00 AM

Didn't attempt this one, but regardless of the form, this is simply stunning, dear Seren.. Hugs..narlwne

Jan Allison
Date: 2/22/2015 7:05:00 AM

It was an incredibly tough challenge Arlene - my poem took about 3 hours to write over 2 days - think it is the longest I have ever spent writing one poem:-) Hugs jan xx

Shane Cooper

Date: 2/14/2015 11:14:00 PM

Great poem, it is so difficult to follow the form but you have made it seem so easy the flow is perfect. I am sure that Andrea will love what you have created. Love Shane xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 2/10/2015 7:58:00 AM

like your take on the theme and then name of the form - very clever:-) Hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts
Date: 2/21/2015 11:10:00 PM

Its strange, hard to work out a central word,thx for the comment Jan.....Seren

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/10/2015 4:33:00 AM

Love your exquisite write Seren,, love the powerful form,, absolutely perfect !

Seren Roberts
Date: 2/21/2015 11:09:00 PM

Thx Dr Upma, glad you liked it ....Seren