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          Then ...


We dabbled our toes in soft summer air,

     Speckled with thistle, dancing ...

          Pressing our backs to the meadow, bare

          Honey-dew sweet, our bee-tickled feet

     Your tortoise-shell eyes, entrancing ...

Skin-touching-skin, too willful for glancing ...


          (How we wasted our youth ... being young)



We blew our kisses to cauliflower clouds,

     Swimming in Van Gogh grasses ...

          Curtsying sunflowers waving their shrouds

          The lemon sun shined on our virtues, entwined

     Your scent sweet as warm molasses ...

Lips brushing lips, amidst giggled passes ...


          (How we wasted our youth ... being young)



We spun with sparrows, a strain, to the sky,

     Plucked with an eager intent ...

          Born upon wings as a burgeoning sigh

          Hot-spice afternoon, thus charmed us to swoon

     Too impatient to care what it meant ...

Wherever urge led us, we heedlessly went ...


          (How we wasted our youth ... being young)



How we tasted life's TRUTH ... being young.


                              ~


~ 6th Place ~  in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 3" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 5th Place ~  in the "February 2018 Premiere" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Best Rhyming Poem October thru December 2017" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Sponsor.

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Date: 12/28/2018 2:24:00 PM
This is a good, really good poem! Your imagery is fresh, lyrical, avoiding the myriad cliches that infect so much poetry ( triteness kills a poem in its heart). It's a 1st in my book, Greg....
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Date: 12/26/2018 8:10:00 PM
Oh, the thought of those cauliflower clouds and Van Gogh grasses are magnificent images, Greg. As we get older, we wish we knew then what we know now... Congratulations on your win in the marathon contest! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 12/26/2018 7:50:00 PM
Oh, this poem is so beautiful...and so true, Greg! It is a sparkling gem that's going straight to my faves! Congratulations on your fine win! Sandra <3
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Date: 12/26/2018 4:13:00 PM
I well remember this one . It's TOP NOTCH. Congrats for the win
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Date: 12/26/2018 3:32:00 PM
Greg, congrats on your win on mile 3 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. It reminds me of Wordsworth's "Intimations of Immortality": ~ Though nothing can bring back the hour ~ Of splendour in the grass, of glory in the flower..." ~Mark
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Date: 12/26/2018 3:19:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Date: 2/18/2018 3:47:00 PM
A wonderful poem of youth being wasted on the young. Love the luscious imagery, Gregory. A definite FAVE for me.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 2/22/2018 12:31:00 AM
Oh, thank you VERY much, Line, I'm happy you enjoyed this one ... it's special to me. :-) <3
Date: 2/16/2018 4:12:00 PM
An especially beautiful poem, Gregory, exquisitely crafted throughout. And I was taken with the line in parentheses. You know, it honestly hurts to think about that topic...You have touched me and moved me. Outstanding win! Best of everything, Gershon
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Date: 2/22/2018 12:30:00 AM
That's very kind of you, my friend, and I so relate to your feelings ... blessings and many thanks to you, Gershon, for the wonderful comments! :-)
Date: 2/14/2018 7:51:00 PM
Back again, Gregory, to congratulate you for another fine win for this beautiful poem. It was a pleasure to read it again! Sandra :)
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Date: 2/22/2018 12:29:00 AM
So sweet of you, Sandra - I'm so pleased you enjoyed it - both times! ;-) <3
Date: 2/14/2018 11:01:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Greg. I love, "cauliflower clouds".
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 2/22/2018 12:28:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dale ... so pleased you liked it!
Date: 1/23/2018 12:59:00 PM
Oh I would say that you have a good memory of those time gone by.Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 1/27/2018 4:45:00 PM
Thank you so much, Darlene - yes, there are some memories that are MUCH sweeter than others ... for many reasons! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/22/2018 4:58:00 PM
Second time round even better read, no wonder this ranked high, congrats on number 3 of top 100, will make it to 1 I'm sure!!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/22/2018 7:49:00 PM
Thank you, John, I greatly appreciate your kind comments, and your opinion is a valuable one to me, as you know! Blessings, Bud! :-)
Date: 1/20/2018 5:20:00 AM
Hi Greg, your descriptions are mesmerising. Cauliflower clouds etc.. Again the poetic juices are just so inviting. The build up toward the end is just the thing to chase. Well done ol buddy
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Date: 1/22/2018 7:47:00 PM
Thank you, Good Buddy, I greatly appreciate that ... blessings and best wishes, Jannie - I am always so pleased when you "drop by" my poems. I pray things have improved in SA, my friend - always thinking of you! :-)
Date: 1/10/2018 9:37:00 PM
A beautiful - delicate as a watercolour - poem written with the lightest of touches , yet still conveying sensual passion. Remarkable.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 10:22:00 PM
Wow, thank you so much, my friend, what a marvelous comment ... both my mom and sis are amazing artists, my mom in watercolor and ink especially, and I often approach poems with that sort of mindset, that our words are the colors, the way we COMBINE them is our brush, so your mentioning this poem in such terms honors me a great deal ... thank you so much, Geoffrey - I greatly appreciate your comments, and none are taken for granted! :-)
Date: 1/5/2018 4:20:00 PM
Such a well-written poem, Gregory! Congratulations on your fine placement. , Sandra
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/5/2018 5:05:00 PM
Thank you SO much, Sandra ... you are one of the standard-setters here, and your opinion is one I value highly ... I'm very thankful you found this worthy! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/5/2018 2:12:00 PM
Awesome. Superbly done, Gregory.
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Date: 1/5/2018 5:04:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Line, thank you very much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/5/2018 1:23:00 PM
oh how beautiful dear Greg! Love this one, my fave so far, congrats :) -luloo
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Date: 1/5/2018 5:03:00 PM
That means a great deal to me, Luloo - your opinion is quite important to me, and I'm so pleased you liked this one ... this was a labor of love, and I had so much fun with the mixed metre! Thanks so much for the sweetness, my friend - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/4/2018 12:08:00 AM
Congratulations, Greg on your fine win with such a wonderful poem.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/4/2018 12:38:00 AM
Blessings, My Poetic Brother ... I thank you sincerely for your kindness, as always! Happy New Year, Subimal! :-)
Date: 1/3/2018 8:47:00 PM
This is breathtaking Gregory. Blissful poetry. Congratulations for your excellent win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/4/2018 12:37:00 AM
Oh, that's so sweet of you, Susan, and I thank you very kindly for the heart-felt comment ... so pleased you enjoyed it, friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/3/2018 4:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Gregory. That doesn't sound wasting at all!
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Date: 1/4/2018 12:36:00 AM
Thank you so much, Agnes ... that's what I was trying to convey, the irony that it contradicts that old phrase "Youth is wasted on the young" ... I think most of us feel our youth may have been reckless and wild, but certainly not wasted! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/3/2018 12:54:00 PM
Great story, rhymes, and imagery, Greg!! It's nice to see you off to a strong start to 2018 (even though I know this was written last year). Continuing best wishes to you and yours! :) Bartholomew
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/4/2018 12:34:00 AM
That's so very kind of you, Bartholomew - I'm so pleased you liked it, my friend! Blessings to you! :-)
Date: 1/3/2018 10:57:00 AM
Greg congrats on your win!
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Date: 1/4/2018 12:33:00 AM
Thank you, Brenda!
Date: 1/3/2018 10:11:00 AM
Loved this Greg, congrats on another fine win!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/4/2018 12:32:00 AM
Very kind of you, John - I'm humbled and honored to be on a list with such fine poets - thank you, Sir! :-)
Date: 12/28/2017 8:51:00 PM
amazing poem! I wasted my youth but not like this. This sounds much more rewarding.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 12/30/2017 9:43:00 PM
That's very kind, James, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it ... thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)
Date: 12/28/2017 7:36:00 PM
wow, Gregory, an AMAZING Poem. I love this one so much. Truly one of the most romantic poems of the week. FAVE
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 12/30/2017 9:42:00 PM
That's so kind of you, Andrea, and I thank you very much! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
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