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Among the Fallen Leaves of Rust

Wind sings a dirge where leaves have turned to rust. In the autumn of his life my dear friend has left me. As I release his ashes to the wind, they scatter like dust among the fallen leaves of rust.
For the Contest of Rick Parise: "Rust"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 5/23/2012 11:42:00 AM
I noticed this was for a contest after I reread this. It had to be a winner because it made me ponder about how must of felt losing your friend.
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Date: 3/4/2012 10:46:00 AM
Andrea,congrats on your win in the contest.Loved this touching write very much.I will send a soupmail regarding this poem later.
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Date: 3/4/2012 8:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Rick's contest with this sad write Andrea :) love Wilma
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Date: 3/4/2012 8:17:00 AM
Well done Andrea. Really enjoyed this one
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Date: 3/4/2012 6:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this excellent piece Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/3/2012 11:30:00 PM
Very nice, Andrea. I love poems that have, what I call, "the sandwich affect" - with the beginning thought repeated in the ending thought. I think the hardest thing for a poet to do is to bring their poem to a proper ending. You do it nicely here in a sweet, short, but complete verse. Deserving of it's high standing in the contest. Congratulations. Joe
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Date: 3/3/2012 9:39:00 PM
ANDREA, Congratulations with your wonderful entry IN RICK'S CONTEST ;-) well done~ALWAYS PD*
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Date: 3/3/2012 6:56:00 PM
A sad write hope alls well! congrad's light & love
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Date: 3/3/2012 6:51:00 PM
Yo my friend!!!!!!!I'm back..........Love your poem!!~I wonder if you placed in the contest(LOL)~I finally judged it!!I've missed your kind comments...so I had to come back (LOL)~CONGRATS on this beauty!!!~God bless////^Rick
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Date: 1/17/2012 9:27:00 PM
So basically, if I couldn't find a word to rhyme with Jarvik..he probably wouldn't be a good choice to experiment much with? right? I can see exactly your point..actually I need to change most of them to rhyme instead of calling them clerihew..right? or couplet...?
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Date: 12/31/2011 3:01:00 PM
A sad write with this poem as death is always sad. On the upswing I wish you and Joe a very Happy New YEAR'S. Our year can only get better than last. Hugs my friend. got your card yesterday. love phyl
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Date: 12/29/2011 1:54:00 AM
Oh Andrea..! this is sadness.) "however" it has a lot of empathy in the lines, i wish you well in Ricks contest..
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Date: 12/27/2011 2:04:00 PM
Lovely indeed, but such a sad piece, Andrea
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Date: 12/27/2011 10:40:00 AM
this is brilliant, what else can one say, except i'm just blown away. i still remember your eyes from a previous photo you posted, they blew me away also. a winner here in the contest with out doubt, Happy New Year to you Andrea and your family. harry
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Date: 12/27/2011 2:25:00 AM
Awesome write, Andrea, although sad! Years are coming and going as are the seasons, sometimes far to quick! Wish you best of luck in Rick's contest!...Hugs...Gert:)
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Date: 12/26/2011 7:42:00 PM
So glad to read it's for the contest and not for you. Love the first line, can almost hear the wind; great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best. LIzzie
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Date: 12/26/2011 2:47:00 PM
Your poetry is always on the top shelf... what ever subject you tackle you suceed... all love and hugs to you.. Michael
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Date: 12/26/2011 12:23:00 PM
Nice read for me this morning Andrea. I wish you luck in the contest. I'm sorry for your lost friend. Are you not going out shopping? There should be a lot of sale after Christmas day. Can you please read my HEADS entry. I changed my piece from TAILS to HEADS. Thanks for visiting my work. Love Dalila
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Date: 12/26/2011 12:29:00 AM
This is a beauty Andrea, I love how you utilized rust here. Wishing you all the best for Rick's contest ;) Love Wilma
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Date: 12/25/2011 11:15:00 PM
A heartfelt poem, Andrea. You make me sad with this loss of friend poem. Merry Christmas, dear :) You wrote this wonderfully.
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Date: 12/25/2011 6:33:00 PM
I am going to have to look into some of these contest. I am not familiar with this form, but it look interesting. I have heard the dirge in the wins... Take care. Janet
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Date: 12/25/2011 1:18:00 PM
It's not a true story, guys. It's just something imagined for the contest. Thanks for the concern though!
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Date: 12/25/2011 1:02:00 PM
Such a sad write on a sweet Christmas night. If there's truth to this poem. May it not fill your home with a durge of a dark. Christmas blight.
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Date: 12/25/2011 6:41:00 AM
It it a story of broken heart where rust ends as dust in the song of wind? It's really the poem of fallen leaves of Rust. bl
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Date: 12/25/2011 2:51:00 AM
A sad write here Andrea.Nice use of metaphors.Wish you goodluck in the contest.....kash
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