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Slightly edited by a slightly deranged Space Cadet ;) on May 29, 2017

I sit with the wall against my back. The wall refuses to move despite endless requests. The door opens and closes its mouth, it wishes to say something, but nothing comes of it, only its letterbox chatters ceaselessly and without any deep meaning to it, drops hints every now and then. The wall is annoyed with the door, but I am fed up with the noise. I stand to try and look out the window, but... This place hushed in shadow. If only I can remember where I went this night, they did throw me in, away from light. I roll up the walls like a Persian rug, smother the clatter of the metallic letterbox that tries to say goodbye in a thousand words. I hear its muffled apologies. I see a hundred neatly white, folded paper sheets fall at my feet, covered in coloured sentences. I throw shadows at the wall, words at the door, colours at the ceiling; demons increase my estrangement in the small room, then the walls suddenly turn soft and white, my arms are bound behind my back. Fog dissolves in faithful whispers. Demons grow faces and white clothes. Mouths with broad smiles talk in tongues (heard, understood), carry syringes and multi-coloured pills. And day begins. *** May 1, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 5/2/2017 6:41:00 AM
Wow. 7. fave.
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Darren White
Date: 5/9/2017 1:15:00 PM
Oh lol ma mo, only see this now! Thank you :D
Date: 5/1/2017 1:50:00 PM
Oh Yes. Once all the aggression lets go and once the expressions release the world becomes right. This is inspired with magnificence with a perfect ending to match the theme and words. Honestly. Well done in its entirety. You are something.....
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 1:59:00 PM
Thanks, Lisa :) And you Lisa, are something too!
Date: 5/1/2017 11:15:00 AM
This is the way poetry is supposed to be written. If I was reading a Philip Levine book and came across your poem I wouldn't think for a moment it seemed out of place. I'd love to see you develop in this style and voice, you could go far. Did you consider the possibility of writing this in the present tense? I think it would add to the intensity by creating a bit of suspense, but that's not to say there's a thing wrong with it now.
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 12:24:00 PM
Hmmmm, I thought about that, present tense... Dunno why I stick to past tense so often. I love that I think. I wrote two in this style more or less earlier. Thanks Phillip.
Date: 5/1/2017 9:55:00 AM
Very inventive, fascinating, and clever to boot. John
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 10:07:00 AM
Thank you John, happy you like it :)
Date: 5/1/2017 8:55:00 AM
Wow Darren , as I said once before you have such a way with words, they roll off your tongue and become 'Pearls '. Thanks for the wisdom that you share with us all.
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 9:15:00 AM
Thank you Maria, this one was incredibly fun to write and terribly difficult the same time.
Date: 5/1/2017 8:22:00 AM
Your descriptive brilliance shines in this unearthing piece...I was able to imagine the collage of feelings collapsing all at once.
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 8:36:00 AM
I am so very happy that this was understandable, something that sometimes happens to me and is so abstract that it is hard to put into words :)
Date: 5/1/2017 8:19:00 AM
Amazing, once again my friend. Your talent is multi-faceted, the depth of your thoughts always produce something that causes us to think. Rolling the walls up like carpets. I loved that picture you created. Nicely done Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 8:35:00 AM
That was one delirious delusion :) I am glad you like the way I managed to condense it into a poem.
Date: 5/1/2017 6:10:00 AM
Only the inmates truly understand this write, Duir! The stories I could tell as well, my friend! I love your wounded words, my friend! (At least you can smoke in yours)
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Darren White
Date: 5/1/2017 6:15:00 AM
Wounded words... what a great expression. But yes, completely true Budgie.... Hug Brendan from me :)

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