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A Promise a Memory - Heartbreak and Loss

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Dad, I said I would come and be with you. I had to sell my home in Oregon; we naturally hoped, but had no clue when it would sell; we could pack and be gone. I had to sell my home in Oregon. So much despair you felt since I wasn't near. When it would sell; we could pack and be gone. You bid me to stay, with many a tear. So much despair you felt since I wasn't near your anguish made you increasingly frail. You bid me to stay, with many a tear. With closed eyes, and your last breath, your strength fail. Your anguish made you increasingly frail we naturally hoped, but had no clue. With closed eyes, and your last breath, your strength fail. Dad, I said I would come and be with you. 10/20/2017

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Date: 10/30/2017 9:25:00 AM
Eve, congratulations on your win in my contest with this sad write. I am sure he understood you were trying your best to come, its just that he couldn't wait.
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Date: 10/29/2017 6:35:00 PM
Oh, this is so sad, Eve, and written so well. Congratulations on your fine placement. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/29/2017 12:13:00 PM
Such a tragic tale you shared with us and I thank you for it. Congrats on your win
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Date: 10/29/2017 9:34:00 AM
Hi Eve, What a loving and heartfelt write. I lost my dad 12 years ago. I miss him so much. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. It was well deserved- Alexis
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Date: 10/21/2017 6:53:00 AM
Oh, what a powerful Pantoum! Very nicely done my friend! The message is very clear, it's a sad and traumatic event that transpired and left you in tears! I'm so sad about this event that happened, I hope that time heals! What a fabulously emotional piece, Great Work Eve!!
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Date: 10/20/2017 5:39:00 PM
Absolutely heartbreaking memory Eve, you tried your best for your father :-) hugs jan xx
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