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A Promise

Twilight descending on the surrounding hills ! I hear a lonely bird trill! The most soulful melody I ever heard! Isn’t she supposed to be in her warm nest? Quiet in slumber, together with her mate?  Her sorrowful song baffles me that she is still waiting! Although he promised to return in no time, Her doting mate is not yet with her, Is she going to croon all night long,   And fade away in the horizon! May 29, 2020 Second Place : A Promise Contest ( Sponsor: Silent One)

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Date: 6/28/2020 12:09:00 PM
Hello Mala, something could have happened to her mate, i think she will crone all night long.Enjoy your day my friend.Love Darlene Enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 6/26/2020 3:02:00 PM
So much longing , this short poem goes straight into our heart, lovely
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/28/2020 6:34:00 AM
Thanks, Debjani. Really appreciate your kind, thoughtful words. Love, Mala
Date: 6/8/2020 4:10:00 PM
Connecting with nature is part of a poet's DNA, and you have done it so beautifully here, Mala. Congratulations on your placement ~ John
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/8/2020 6:33:00 PM
Thank you, John, for your lovely kind words. Really appreciate your inspiring comments.
Date: 6/7/2020 5:51:00 PM
This is a masterpiece! I return to read again and put this on my top faves! Congratulations!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/7/2020 9:57:00 PM
Thank you, Dear Poet! You inspire me with your lovely comments. Your comments make me want to write more!
Date: 6/7/2020 8:22:00 AM
Beautifully sad--some promises remain unfulfilled..great write. BIG congrats on your win.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/7/2020 11:30:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay, for your thoughtful comment. Inspiring!
Date: 6/6/2020 1:09:00 PM
This is so beautiful Mala. A blend of sadness, hope, despair and love. You have a gift of penning stories that touch hearts. Congratulations on your win :)
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/6/2020 3:40:00 PM
Aditi, thank you so much for such a thoughtful comment. I am looking forward to read your excellent poem.
Date: 6/6/2020 7:36:00 AM
A sad state of affairs, many a beloved is waiting.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 6/6/2020 3:38:00 PM
Thank you so much. I really heard a lonely bird crooning at dusk! Felt sad! Thanks for your kind comment.
Date: 5/29/2020 12:11:00 PM
Mala, I enjoyed listening to this songbird's lonesome trill with you and wondering if it will be connected to her mate before the night is through. Lovely musings ~ John
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 5/29/2020 5:40:00 PM
Hi John, so glad to see your poetic comment. I really wished her mate came back! Thank you so much.
Date: 5/29/2020 8:50:00 AM
Ahhhh, so beautiful! Even birds hold on to promise. How much more we humans? To my favorites..
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 5/29/2020 5:37:00 PM
Thank you, dear friend. It's true - I watch birds - amazing! Best wishes.