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POTW 1 Oct 2018

Gossip about her
swept the school yard through
“Hey if you’ve got what it takes 
There’s this girl named Sue
For a pack of smokes
or a drink or two
She’ll kiss you ~ she’ll please you
like no other girl can do”

Her fuchsia glossed lips
Matched the colour of her hair
Her legs went on forever
She had a self-assured flair
He yearned for those baby blues 
to stray his way
How did the cool guys snare girls 
come what may?

Dreams on his pillow a teenage fantasy Were seconds away from becoming a manly reality She promised to meet him in the park one night Two packs of Marlboro’s Under the pale moonlight A brief kiss on the lips then as she swiftly turned to go He yanked her back hard and as she fell to the floor A fantasy was shattered Hopes tossed away ~ abused Feelings of rejection Cast aside and confused
He lived in an era Where double standards were applauded Girls were shamed For going all the way Boys rewarded However integrity doesn’t stoop to lows no need to impress Head high as he walked it was not worth the stress
The journey was his ~ along this untrodden road Tomorrow ~ todays rejection would be yesterday’s episode Every step away from her was a gentle elixir Then came her words on the wind ~ barely a whisper
‘Hey ~ I’m a virgin too ~ and a skank I’m not They sully my name and my character they blot The smokes are for my mum it eases her pain And for my sick Ma I’ll do this again and again’ Continued in 'Tears on her pillow'...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 11/19/2019 3:58:00 AM
Wow.
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Date: 11/19/2019 4:53:00 AM
Thanks Kai, appreciate your visit , so glad you liked this....Maria
Date: 6/1/2019 7:05:00 AM
Did you dip your pen in the ocean of emotions before writing this Maria? Oh! That was a poignant write!!!
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Date: 4/24/2019 10:02:00 PM
Not bad...LOL, Maria. This is BRILLIANTLY conceived and executed. 'Masterpiece' comes to mind...Can't believe it's not POTD... Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 4/18/2019 9:08:00 AM
One of your best Maris. I am moved and impressed.
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Date: 4/18/2019 6:44:00 AM
Sorry my friend, I only now have found this truly exceptional poem! You have nailed it, that was the way it was. And truth be told, the majority of the time it was vicious lies being spread about a girl. I, even back then, took no stock in such tales.. Great poetry my friend.. A definite fav , for your pen always yields its precious gold..
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Date: 11/26/2018 12:36:00 PM
I agree w/Vlad, you have a golden pen, Maria. This is such a beautiful morality play poem. It ignites the spirit towards a good path, tho' I carcinogenously disapprove of giving sick mom any cancer sticks ... lol! This is a superb write, however. Kudos on POTW. Love and peace always.
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Date: 11/19/2018 8:14:00 PM
I was there with the characters.....great write.
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Date: 10/27/2018 11:03:00 AM
Hi Maria, this is an excellent write from your golden pen. I love the creativity, the way you build the piece. It holds the attention from beginning to end. I am now going to go over to part two. Part one is most definitely a fave Maria. Have a wonderful Sunday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:58:00 PM
Thanks so much Mike. I truly appreciate your wonderful visits and astute comments. So glad you enjoyed it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/26/2018 1:07:00 PM
This is brilliant Maria! Congratulations on a very deserving POTW! On to read part two...: )
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:56:00 PM
Thank you my dear Connie, so glad that you enjoyed it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/13/2018 10:26:00 AM
Wow, Maria... This really draws the reader in... on to part two...
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:55:00 PM
Thanks Becca, so glad you thought so my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/10/2018 3:15:00 PM
Brilliant.
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:27:00 AM
Thanks so much Mark, appreciate it....Maria
Date: 10/9/2018 5:05:00 AM
Congratulations on a well deserved POTW honor, dear Maria. Your deeply emotional poetry is beautifully written, eloquent and compelling. It is a sincere pleasure to read your work. A fave. T.J
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:27:00 AM
Thank you so much Teppo, I truly appreciate your visits and support my dear friend. I know how busy you are. ....Maria hugs
Date: 10/8/2018 12:09:00 PM
Hello Maria, Congratulations on POTW with this emotionally-riveting and thought-provoking rhyme about "A girl named Sue." Fully of intensity and precision of expression. I sincerely hope that times are changing for the better. I look forward the next installment of this compelling and captivating theme. Superb Work -- and A FAVE!!! Best Always, Gary
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:25:00 AM
Thanks so much Gary, and its so great to see you again. All shall be revealed in Part 2, which I do hope you will enjoy as much as this, Thanks for the fave I truly appreciate it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/8/2018 6:55:00 AM
Wow, your turning this around, sure to make the reader carry on, and why not, the poetry, is that good, written the way it was, and looking forward to the way it is? or is there another twist,,,,? You are such an intriguing writer, Dear Maria
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:12:00 AM
Thank you Harry, all shall be revealed in Part 2, thanks for your continued support, I truly appreciate it my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/5/2018 8:11:00 AM
Well well Mary...A lovely write indeed...it certainly would make a wonderful series of poems...nice feel to it...written with character and style...Congratulations...
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:10:00 AM
Thanks my dear friend. I was thinking along the same lines. I hope you can drop by and read Part 2 which I've posted ..Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 5:04:00 PM
Congrats on POTW..
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:09:00 AM
Thanks my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/3/2018 12:41:00 PM
Excellent in verse, you have written. I loved it, especially the surprise ending. Congrats on POTW. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:08:00 AM
Thanks so much Marilyn, glad you loved it, hope you will read Part 2?....Maria hugs
Date: 10/3/2018 4:25:00 AM
Congratulations on POTW honors given your very creative, insightful and thought provoking poem . I see the depths of your magnificent talent as never ending and a great boon to poetry my dear friend.. A fav...
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:07:00 AM
Thanks so much Robert, that means a lot to me. I appreciate your continued support and friendship....Maria hugs
Date: 10/2/2018 8:28:00 AM
This is SO good Maria. Congratulations on a fine POTW! :) xomo
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Date: 10/12/2018 12:05:00 AM
Thanks so much Maureen, so glad that you liked it my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/2/2018 3:38:00 AM
Wow Maria! Congratulations on having this fantastic poem honored as POTW! : )
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:40:00 PM
Thank you Connie, so glad you liked it my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/1/2018 3:07:00 PM
A terrific poem, the ending is classic! Congratulations on POTW!
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:39:00 PM
Thank you Caren, so glad you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/1/2018 10:04:00 AM
I enjoyed your very powerful poem with a twist at the end, congratulations on POTW!
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:38:00 PM
Thank you Tania, so glad you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 9/30/2018 10:51:00 AM
A very intense and also touching piece.Sadly also very relatable although hopefully times are changing. Well earned POTW,congratulations Maria.
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:37:00 PM
Thank you Sylvia, so glad you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 9/30/2018 9:52:00 AM
Poetry within poetry! Congratulations!
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:36:00 PM
Thanks Sunlite, glad you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 9/30/2018 5:52:00 AM
Back with congratulations Maria on POTW. Tom. PS, any news yet ?
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Date: 9/30/2018 6:40:00 AM
Thank you Tom, gee that's a pleasant surprise. I'll soup mail you now....Maria hugs
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