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Picture This - Poetry Contest

 

       - Categories : Angst - childhood -death - deep - bird

He was born in the year 1899 A cruel birth, pregnancy poisoning The birth of the child became the mother's death The father of the boy was crushed by love ... he hated and blamed the boy He did not want to know, hear or have anything to do with the child Timothy grew up with his old grandmother As a baby he cries both day and night When he got older he was a confined and sad boy Drawing was the only thing he liked, children express themselves through drawing A cruel world he designed, always in black No researchers interpreted his drawings at that time It was cause for concern, he drew death The personality traits were his own cruel death Timothy concealed his pain, but for him no alternative solutions He is already struggling with suicidal thougths Grandmother died when he was 11 years old, life seemed so scary Helpless and afraid he jumped into the river two days after his grandmother's death ... a black night without moonlight Both of them were buried on the same day and place The grave is always guarded by a black raven 27.03.2018 Sun :) A-L Andresen :) Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Joseph May Image1 5th place in the contest

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Date: 4/28/2018 8:03:00 AM
This is lovely and incredible. Your pen overflow with creativity and wisdom. Wishing to read more of your works...
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Date: 4/28/2018 12:45:00 PM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Funom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/11/2018 10:23:00 PM
Wow, Anne-Lise. Where did this dark brewing powerhouse come from!! Awesome. Congrats on a most deserved placement.
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Date: 4/28/2018 12:44:00 PM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Line :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/3/2018 7:29:00 AM
A deeply, disturbing reality some actually, sadly live in which you depicted so well, Anne-Lise. Humbles one to be more grateful and compassionate, less critical. :) Congrats! ~ Artsie
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Date: 4/8/2018 2:44:00 PM
- Thanks for great comment and congratulations, Artsie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 10:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed your interpretation of this pic.
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Date: 4/2/2018 5:13:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Susan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 2:47:00 PM
Such intense realism in a poignant poetic style. you have evoked a sad spirit (which is great as a poet) Congratulations, Anne-Lise!
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Date: 4/1/2018 2:49:00 PM
- Thanks for great comment and congratulations, Ralph :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 11:08:00 AM
Fascinating, sad story. CONGRATS, Anne-Lise! Janice
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:40:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Janice :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 9:21:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Anne-Lise. Happy Easter :)
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:40:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Heidi :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 9:04:00 AM
Back with congrats on your win, Anne-Lise.
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:39:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 8:58:00 AM
Anne-Lise, a sad story depicting how cruel life and people can sometimes be. Congrats on your win. John
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:38:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 8:49:00 AM
So dark! Chilling tale. Congratulations on your win! xomo <3
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Date: 4/1/2018 11:38:00 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 7:21:00 AM
I like the title, it fits the darkness of the write well. A beautifully written tale of sadness and tragedy.
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Date: 4/1/2018 8:02:00 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment, James :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 4/1/2018 6:57:00 AM
A poignant write Anne..Congrats on your win
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Date: 4/1/2018 8:01:00 AM
- Thank you for my 5th place in the contest, Joseph :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/30/2018 4:35:00 PM
So glad to read this is not a true story, but as you say it was true for many.My heart goes out to both father and son Anne-Lise. Nature versus nurture?
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Date: 3/31/2018 12:40:00 PM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/30/2018 4:43:00 AM
Hello Dear Anne-Lise, I did read this one. I think you should do very well in the contest with this entry!! WOW is the best I can say. The story-line of this dramatic verse is both powerful and sad. I read it from start to finish to absorb all aspects of the overarching metaphor of your narrative here. The last four verses of the poem cement the sadness and the theme in this reader's mind!! Outstanding!! A FAVE TOO!! I really enjoyed this write. Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 3/30/2018 8:06:00 AM
- Thanks Gary, yes, it's a dark and sad poem - Glad you enjoyed it, many thanks for your time and great comment ... especially thanks for your fav. :) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/28/2018 11:48:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise , powerful sad start and ending , good luck in contest my friend ::))) Hugs~~~Niall
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Date: 3/29/2018 11:40:00 AM
- Niall, many thanks for your visit and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/28/2018 7:29:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise. You have written a sad story that really reaches the reader deeply. It is true children can express through drawing. It is heartbreaking to think of outcomes like this going on. You have described it well. I hope all is ok. Take care and good luck in the contest :)
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Date: 3/29/2018 11:40:00 AM
- Heidi, many thanks for your visit and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/28/2018 7:26:00 AM
A very sad and haunting write. ...a black night without moonlight
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Date: 3/29/2018 11:39:00 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/28/2018 7:19:00 AM
Devastating story expressed artfully within the perimeter of the requirements of the contest dearest, Anne-Lise! Good luck my friend! Hugs xxx
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Date: 3/29/2018 11:39:00 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Demetrios :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/28/2018 6:52:00 AM
Dark an spooky :/. Great penning.
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Date: 3/28/2018 7:07:00 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Yazmin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 8:40:00 PM
What a sad tale you tell here! Is it based on a true story? Moving..... Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:48:00 AM
- No, this is not based on a real story Matthew ... but certainly many such stories throughout the ages :) - Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 6:41:00 PM
So dark and meaningful! You can write any way you choose and do it well.
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:45:00 AM
- Yes, dark and sad Sunlite - Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 5:08:00 PM
You captured saddened emotions in your poetic words..a touching story..best for a win, Anne-Lise.
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:44:00 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and great comment, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 4:34:00 PM
A sad but brilliant verse Sunshine, in reality you hear of stories like this one. We have to count our blessings sometimes. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:43:00 AM
- Certainly many ... life on the dark side, Tom - I appreciate your time and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 3:56:00 PM
Life is not easy...things will go wrong...this case it's worse than the words written down... May they RIP...All the best to you Anne-Lise
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:39:00 AM
- A sad life in loneliness, Arturo - Many thanks for your visit and nice comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 3/27/2018 2:52:00 PM
a very sad poem my poetic friend, after reading I wished I had known his last name, you made this poem seem so real...good luck
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Date: 3/28/2018 6:36:00 AM
- Thank you very much, Frederic :) - I appreciate your time and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

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