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6 - 8 Ragdoll - Emotive Write

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Sally was a new mum, whose baby screamed continually Despite being fed and changed, her child continued to cry Rocking and cooing a lullaby did not console the babe Patience was wearing thin for Sally, a single mother Sally was exhausted and one night she finally snapped She snatched the wailing infant from her crib Shook her like a rag doll until the baby went limp Finally, the child stopped crying … 6 - 8 Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud 10-25-17

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Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 11/1/2017 10:38:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Jan! This is very powerful!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/1/2017 5:10:00 PM

Thanks Dale its such a sad poem and sadly these things happen:-( hugs jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 10/31/2017 4:59:00 PM

Oh! Such a powerful write and I love how you always tend to write out of the box I loved your take on this theme, congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 10/31/2017 6:03:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Brian, I never know where my muse will take me but I do try and write something totally unique:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/31/2017 3:28:00 PM

riveting scene from your imaginative mind, jan... warm congrats on your medal; i can imagine this story!.. thanks for joining which i highly appreciate..

Jan Allison
Date: 10/31/2017 6:02:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 10/31/2017 12:53:00 AM

Congrtulations, Jan on your win with a fine poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/31/2017 4:11:00 AM

Thanks Subimal:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/30/2017 4:55:00 PM

Back to congratulate you for your great write ! Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 10/30/2017 5:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/30/2017 4:55:00 PM

Powerfully sad, but brings forth the ugly facts we do need to think about, Jan. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/30/2017 5:14:00 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) It was quite a challenge writing this poem:-( hugs jan xx

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 10/30/2017 4:01:00 PM

wonderful write.sad poem. Congrats on your well deserved win...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/30/2017 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Olusegun:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/30/2017 3:02:00 PM

- A really sad poem, Jan - Congratulations on your win ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/30/2017 3:10:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise it is a very sad poem and sadly i am reading of this terrible thing happening more and more often:-(:-( hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/30/2017 1:58:00 PM

Back again with congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/30/2017 2:05:00 PM

Thanks Janis:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/27/2017 9:11:00 PM

oh, my, such an impact poem, Jan, but this goes on :'( good luck in the contest hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2017 5:30:00 AM

I read about it in the press Eve, it is so so sad :-( hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 10/26/2017 3:13:00 PM

Jan, oh so sad, wonderful writing though, best of luck

Jan Allison
Date: 10/26/2017 5:41:00 PM

Thanks Constance there are so many different interpretations to the themes I have seen a couple of poems I think will place very highly:-) hugs jan xx

Pashang Salehi

Date: 10/26/2017 6:33:00 AM

I came to smile....leaving with the sigh...

Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/29/2017 12:21:00 PM

Still love you....

Jan Allison
Date: 10/26/2017 6:50:00 AM

I'm sorry Pashang:-( hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/25/2017 10:41:00 PM

So awful! Someone I know has shaken baby syndrome. Her father is in prison. Such an awful thing!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/26/2017 6:50:00 AM

I'm so sorry you have experience of this Kim, i see more and more stories in the press of children being abused like this:-( hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/25/2017 8:38:00 PM

Great write on such a sad topic, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/26/2017 6:49:00 AM

Thanks Agnes it is an emotive subject:-( hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/25/2017 7:34:00 PM

I really like how you did yours too, Jan. Maybe this was the most favored topic for poets. I am seeing many rag doll poems. I liked all three of the themes. The sunlight in eyes would have been romantic if I'd have done it.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 7:36:00 PM

Its great we chose a similar theme of abuse, it needs to be highlighted more as sadly it is happening on an all too frequent basis, there is currently a case in the Uk of an adopted little girl who tragically died:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/25/2017 5:59:00 PM

This is so sad Jan, and the fact that it happens all the time is so scary. I liked the way you presented this. It is well written and filled with emotion! I hope it does well in the contest. : )

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 6:18:00 PM

Andrea and I have chosen similar themes of abuse, it will be interesting to see what Nette thinks of our sad poems:-( hugs jan xx

Tahira Parveen

Date: 10/25/2017 3:35:00 PM

So sad, but true, does happen.Good write Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 6:17:00 PM

Its very sad Tahira:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/25/2017 1:33:00 PM

Very sad Jan... unfortunately it does happen

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 6:17:00 PM

You are right there Tim it's terribly sad:-( hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 10/25/2017 12:49:00 PM

A very sad ending to this one Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 6:16:00 PM

It is so sad to read the press Jospeh, there is currently a murder case in court of a adopted child - it will be interesting to see what the verdict is:-( hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/25/2017 12:23:00 PM

Ohh this is so sad Jan. It took me by surprise.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 12:27:00 PM

I hope it opens people's eyes to abuse that is often seen in the UK press it is an emotive subject that is sadly all too real:-( hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/25/2017 11:19:00 AM

I must say Jan, this was very moving. As you came toward the close I was expecting this sad end. So true today, Best wishes for the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 12:18:00 PM

Thanks Janice it is a very sad poem but I wanted to do a different take on the picture:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 10/25/2017 10:21:00 AM

This was a difficult read for me, Jan, because I find it so hard to imagine that any parent could do that to their child. I guess I should leave my idealistic world and come back to reality. Your poem certainly had an emotional impact on me! Good luck in the contest. John

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 12:17:00 PM

I keep reading about these tragedies in the press it is so so sad. In Scotland they are making it illegal for a parent to smack a child... I wonder if this will eventually be made law in other jurisdictions. :-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 10/25/2017 9:17:00 AM

A tragic ending to what should've been a new and blessed beginning. Your emotive writes never take a back seat to your humorous ones, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 9:25:00 AM

Thanks so much Lin, your continued support is so much appreciated , I hope people can see a little more to me than a humourist,:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/25/2017 9:00:00 AM

OH wow. I have joked in the past that I didn't have kids because "shaken baby syndrome" happens. Killer pen Jan, the pun was apt ;) I'm making light but wowsa, you have my vote. Good luck :) xomo

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 9:26:00 AM

We will wait and see Mo lol, I can't remember the last time I got a first with Nette:-)I've already read a couple that I predict will place very high:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 10/25/2017 9:05:00 AM

I smell a first place finish :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/25/2017 9:04:00 AM

Thanks Mo:-) I keep reading in the press about children being killed by on of their parents after the baby was so violently shaken it had severe brain damage - Nette asked for 'emotional impact' I hope this one delivers what she is looking for!:-( hugs jan xx