With Such Longing

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Inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane 
an exotic treasure of another sort held me spellbound 
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign. 

Guilty, I stood beside a Lychee tree, expectations of arraign 
but she smiled with cherry lips, in pale blue she was gowned 
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. 

A delightful scene of refined Chinoiserie, created quite urbane 
Lotus flowers, Jin of bonsai, beside the paragon were found
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign 

Exquisitely she sat, blush on her cheeks, fragile as porcelain.
I longed to caress her coifed hair, cascading and unbound
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. 

I feared death, for when she beckoned my heart was being slain. 
I bowed before the Eastern goddess in whose beauty I had drowned
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign.

Worthy of gracing a palace, she and the Chinoiserie shall remain
no longer will I find her graceful figure on the ground
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign.


July 16th, 2017

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Date: 7/21/2017 5:54:00 AM
An excellent villanelle to accompany that beautiful painting, Lin:) well done:)
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Date: 7/21/2017 6:12:00 AM
Your remarks are always so uplifting, Jo. Thanks so much.
Date: 7/19/2017 1:27:00 PM
You just unzipped the covers of my mind to the unprecedented worship of your adorable lines with a powerful choice of words that can't just be ignored. Showers of your wisdom is well palpated in this page and the only thing I can say is a big WELL DONE! Can't wait to have more of your mental command flowing through my reading mind.
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Date: 7/19/2017 1:33:00 PM
and how many other poems did you copy/paste this comment on? I know you did that on my last poem...same exact comment on at least 2 other poets on the same day... Don't bother visiting my writes with such insincere words.
Date: 7/16/2017 1:03:00 PM
A beautiful poem, Lin. Very well written.love and hugs,Catie
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Date: 7/17/2017 7:31:00 AM
Thanks so much, Catie.
Date: 7/16/2017 11:40:00 AM
Oh so full of oriental desire and your imagery is outstanding Lin I could picture the scene so perfectly:-)a beautiful villanelle I have seldom written this challenging form:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/17/2017 7:31:00 AM
It IS a challenge but worth the effort when it comes together. Thanks, Jan.
Date: 7/16/2017 11:23:00 AM
Impressive again, Lin.
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Date: 7/17/2017 7:30:00 AM
Thanks, Dale.