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5/6/2010 2:53:28 PM
Pet Peeve I'd always want to know if I made such an error.
5/6/2010 7:25:05 PM
Soup Mail you have to click on a poem of the person you want to send mail to. and there should be a soup bowl symbol. cant fully remember if its next to the poem title or the poets name though sorry.
5/7/2010 5:20:26 PM
punched in face by fist in face errrr strings burst from sirens
lights strobe in our ears blinding us
i can hardly listen to speaking mumbles
a heavy bass resonates between us
down another drink upside down
yeah thats quite entertaining to millions
not so funny on your own

ooppps punched in face by fist in face
blood falls out of face that has been punched by fist
blood from face falls on floor fist removes from face
placed down by bodies side
unclenches

night ends on sticky floors
fight ends before it began
light comes on
get out get out
homeward bound i headed
alone again naturally
another great night some would say

my head will not agree with my stomach in the morning
neither will its contents
5/8/2010 8:57:03 AM
punched in face by fist in face i guess the fact no-one has been critical of this means its perfect. just as i thought. lol
5/8/2010 3:44:54 PM
punched in face by fist in face thanks for the suggestions matt. i've done another version of it now

errrr strings burst from sirens
lights strobe in our ears blinding us
i can hardly listen to speaking mumbles
a heavy bass resonates between us
down another drink upside down
countdown to rundown

ooppps punched in face by fist in face
blood falls out of face that has been punched by fist
blood from face falls on floor fist removes from face
placed down by bodies side
unclenches

screaming idiots covered in plasma
laugh silently
punch angrily
die readily

night ends on sticky floors
fight ends before it began
light comes on
get out get out

any better?
5/8/2010 5:15:12 PM
Is there life on Mars? i put no because although there are clearly simple celled organisms i don't really count them as life. logic would suggest that there are intelligent forms of life somewhere out there. it seems odd that we would be the only planet capable of creating life. but theres certainly none within our solar system
5/8/2010 7:35:21 PM
Is there life on Mars? water cannot be classed as life because it requires no sustanance and cannot reproduce. flowers are alive trees are alive ants are alive lions are alive. water isnt. fact. lol
5/9/2010 5:09:30 PM
Dreaming a good poem, no need to make anymore changes than you already have. its got a good flow as you intended and theres nothing at all wrong with using the word I.
5/11/2010 6:17:25 PM
tHe+++faLL==OF%maTH(+) the great will fall
in the fall of math
resonant shapes crumble
tangents and radius' melt
multiply pain by infinity
and wallow in sadness

circles contain no answers
mathbooks burn alone at night
divide the earth in percentages
the fall of math
has come at last

we all evaporate into nothing
logic has abandoned humanity
if you cannot add things up
then you will be subtracted

scream into the darkness
scream with all your might
scream for the return of math

no-one answers but emptiness
nothing answers but pi

math has finally fallen. mourn
5/13/2010 4:13:39 PM
OVERSOUL MISUNDERSTOOD i might give myself a crazy nickname. i am from henceforth known as Ragnarok
5/14/2010 7:26:04 AM
OVERSOUL MISUNDERSTOOD i meant the norse end of the world.lol
5/14/2010 8:31:51 PM
Character limit i wish they'd extend how long a title can be as well.
5/24/2010 5:53:21 PM
i'll slam this poem................ i spit words much better than you
there is nothing at all that you can do
check out my spelling and my epic grammar
i'll smash your face in with a claw hammer
i carve my name in all your brains
remember me like the smell when it rains
with my fists of fury i'll knock you out
no-one can tell what the hell im on about
my poems make you think
sit down fools and take a drink
while i amaze you all with my dark power
no-one wants to read a poem about a flower
or a fluffy cloud or falling in love
we want to read about death from above
i go against the grain and dont get a lot of views
but that certainly doesnt mean i'll go boo hoo hoo
it makes me stronger faster smarter
dont count me out i'll have your guts for garters

so what have we learned from me today
listen quite closely to what i do and say
don't self publish its ever so vain
im sure it'll cause you nothing but pain
when you get rejected
it cant be what you all expected
im the best poet in the world bar none
better than byron shelley keats and donne
i best be off to write a dreary haiku
oh wait thats not me its obviously you
5/24/2010 6:11:52 PM
Poem Titles im one of the people who write poems with long titles without capital letters and not much punctuation, so i guess you've never read one of mine. i rarely spell things wrong but i utilise long titles no capitilisation and basic punctuation as a stylistic element of my poems. why should they be bogged down by rules. poetry is about expressing yourself not sticking to what people "think" you should do.
5/24/2010 6:16:55 PM
swearing in poems why can't we do it?
5/24/2010 7:26:57 PM
Poem Titles it's all good. I didn't really start writing poems to become a millionaire anyway.lol. as long as we all like what we write then life is good.
5/26/2010 6:30:30 AM
swearing in poems it just seems very outdated. i understand they don't want poems saying eff this and eff that and being swearing for swearing sake, but surely the odd swear can make a poem better. shakespeare swore so it cant be that bad.
6/1/2010 10:03:23 AM
Congrats Just want to say congrats to everyone who made it through the first round of the site contest. And good luck in the finals.
6/17/2010 6:41:41 PM
Pollux & Castor this is a really good poem but to be honest a lot of people don't use the forums and even less are prepared to comment on poems
6/19/2010 7:13:11 PM
The Weaver maybe it doesnt need punctuation.
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