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3/21/2012 6:29:46 PM

Fatma A.
Posts: 1
bring back the old days
of laughter and smiles
of gatherings and families
of love and joy

bring back the old days
of happy meal toys
of pokemon cards
and toys r us joys

bring back the old days
of disneyland trips
of fairytale cartoons
and believing never ends

bring back the old days
of going back to seventh grade
of falling in love
and never knowing it's consequences

bring back the old days
of my fun filled childhood
of my reckless attitute
of me growing up

bring back the old days
but they can't be brought back
my grandma once said anything beautiful that once was gone, never comes back

bring back the old days
but now i learned
what once was beautiful and left will never come back
so i bid the old days goodbye
never knowing what the future is hiding from me
edited by infinityandbeyond on 3/21/2012
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3/22/2012 10:03:24 AM

marie massop
Posts: 2
the old days will never come back that is true, but we can create wonderful new ones, overcoming our fears and sorrows, however hard that seems. great work.
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