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9/18/2010 1:30:46 AM

Raquel Rezendes
Posts: 4
I had no choice but to let u go
I had no choice but to see u go
I couldn't take care of u if I could
I had no choice but to let u go
Every day I think of u
Every day I cry for u
Every way my love is true
Every day I feel blue
I wonder if you think of me
I wonder if you still love me
I hope you are happy and true
I wonder if you know I love you
Its going on 4 years now
You are almost 12
Its going on 4 years now
I hope you are doing well
I hope your dad is true to you
I hope he tells you I miss you
I hope your dad doing fine
My love for you is so de vine
Everyone here says I'm wrong
Everyone here says I'm no mom
Giving you up was very hard
Listening to everyone is very hard
I had to do it
You know it be true
I had to do it
But I'll always love you
I couldn't fight
With your father no more
I had to do whats right
Costing us togetherness no more
Its been 4 years now
You look just like me
Its been 4 years now
Im smiling with glee
Your father won't know
This ace up my sleeve
Of us being together
Just you and me
The day will come soon
When we will hold so dear
Eachother's warm embrasse
Dont worry its soon
I love you with all my heart
Hear me my precious one
We will be together again
As mother and son

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~Saphire~
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10/15/2010 11:46:17 PM

tara jennings
Posts: 12
Spell out your words and spell check, improper grammar pulls away some of the very powerful emotion involved.
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