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12/6/2012 1:43:36 PM
Becca Weightman
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If I thought for a minute,
that you could change,
I'd keep you by my side
for all times.
Blackened silence beckons
you, drawing you closer,
closer still.
Leaving me behind
To the point of
no return,
no scream
pierces the black night
The strength I lack,
to pull you back,
haunts me,
to this day.
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12/21/2012 12:06:06 PM
Caitlin Dwinnell
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Your poem was deep and dark. I really enjoyed the tone.
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