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9/14/2012 7:10:30 AM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
It's different when your just lookingin,
I wish I could provide you details.
But my gut tells me you're not genuine


I'm sure you could offer me advise,
Supposed if I took it my life wouldsuffice,
That's not good enough for me,
My heart is my only true guidingdevice,


There are so many pliable rules,
I want a sturdy guaranteed,
If you cant provide that for me,
Just please, let this conversation be


Over and over and over and over
I see what people think....
I'm young,
I'm nieve,
Sweet,
Dating a deadbeat,


We'll wait and see...only time willtell,
Who and how you gonna handle the treatsdestiny has on heat.
edited by svlynn18 on 9/14/2012
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