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6/26/2016 4:53:59 PM

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Cross Species Awareness

Beneath a calm ocean,man watches a shark.
They are same in size,but one has advantage.
Man is wearing a wetsuit and long swim fins.
Shark is naked and isnot bearing its teeth.
Water passes silentlythrough gills of stealthy predator.
Bubbles rise fromapparatus of explorer.

A camera and lightsfill hands of explorer.
Teeth and cunning fillfront of shark.
Black tiger stripes anddark eyes of predator
intensify beauty andexclaim an unrevealed advantage.
Locked behind itsinquisitive nature are rows of sharp teeth.
It circles the diver,dipping and bending its fins.

A menacing fin on itsback and long pointed side fins,
the shark does notappear as clumsy as explorer.
A man clamps on tobreathing device with his teeth,
watching effortlessmovements of a curious shark.
There seems to be somewariness in the predator.
Its large dark eyesseem to measure any advantage.

Any threat to the sea’soccupant is from surface advantage.
The wary man’s feetrest on white sand trapped in fins.
He could kick and flapbeneath waves, but is no predator.
He is either a verybrave or very stupid explorer.
If the sea is aplayground or battlefield it belongs to the shark.
If it decides, the kingof the deep can bear its teeth.

It can open its gapingmouth and expose rows of teeth.
It can clamp on to softflesh with an easy advantage.
Such things happenoften in the life of a shark.
It swipes its tail sideto side and climbs and dives with fins.
The only help for thediver is another explorer.
A spear gun orrepellant may offend the predator.

There is not muchcomfort offending such a predator.
It will only findanother place to sink its teeth.
It is a distractingthought for an underwater explorer,
to learn and gainknowledge under this creature’s advantage.
It may not speak; itdoesn’t have hands, but does well with fins.
Ruling the depths, itis a majestic presence this shark.

A vicious predator withacute senses and sharp teeth,
the shark patrolsoceans riding currents with strong agile fins.
The explorer has theadvantage of meeting it at peace.

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