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9/10/2014 8:41:57 PM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	Nearer the end... When memories burn like gold Where life has lost its luster and things no longer matter-- This is a place of thought. Remembering the things you have done and left undone... Where the skirt so short goes all the way up to her Quack! 9/6/'14
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10/21/2014 10:54:54 PM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	If you have ever lusted or had want for something, then it can be plain to see how some things burn in your memory... as that pretty blonde you saw briefly just jogging across the road-- she didn't even see you-- but for some reason she stays in your head. Or that pretty necklace you saved your money up for, only to lose once you left it in your jacket. Gold is something that has always burned in men's minds as it has always been lusted after and wanted for... When things no longer matter sometimes we wonder still "what if", and so you think of things you did and didn't do. This is usually at some point long after when we are closer to the end than the beginning. So we may ponder what could have been if you hadn't and so forth...The surprise at the end is ubiquitous-- each to his own-- it could be life, god, nature, love, or loved-one. It is open to each one's own interpretation.
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