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12/30/2010 2:18:04 AM
Eiken Laan
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Feeble and hunched over
his movement stumbles
as shuffling feet echo
in the shadows
of a candle-lit
forgotten church
as the old priest
performs his sacred rituals
to a few faithful followers
A commitment to the cloth
harbourer of hidden secrets
an unclaimed inheritance
no longer passed on
the last remaining elders
keepers of unwanted wisdom
take their secrets
to the grave
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1/7/2011 4:35:10 AM
Eiken Laan
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I would really appreciate comments please.
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